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Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2002-01-25 11:59 AM

We walked along each gentle beach
Once covered in sands of love
Our footprints left a paired impress
Warmed by the sun above

We packed the scoops of firm wet grains
With laughing playful skill
Until we had a castle built
To hide our passion’s thrill

A salty zephyr kissed our skin
In sands of amber stars
The song of glimmers in our eyes
Music to wind’s guitar

Faint ocean whispers in moonlight
Softly crept along the shoals
A pharos lit waves of passion
In heartbeats of two souls

You can complain because roses have thorns, or you can rejoice because thorns have roses.

-Ziggy

[This message has been edited by Victoria (01-27-2002 09:32 AM).]

sodpossom
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since 2001-06-15

Posts 723
N.C

1 posted 2002-01-25 12:08 PM

That second verse gave me a pretty interesting image.Very nice!

N orth Carolina Girl
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 962
NC,USA

2 posted 2002-01-25 12:29 PM

Victoria,this sounds like a wonderful day at the beach.

Juanita

"always have a smile on your face it makes people wonder what you`re up to:

A Whisper's Caress
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since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

3 posted 2002-01-25 12:31 PM

beautiful collaboration

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

4 posted 2002-01-25 12:36 PM

Beautifully done, Victoria...
I especially loved this part

A salty zephyr kissed our skin
In sands of amber stars
The song of glimmers in our eyes
Music to wind’s guitar

A brilliant romantic write

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

5 posted 2002-01-25 12:50 PM

Oh Nice Victoria,
"A salty zephyr kissed our skin.
In sands of amber stars
The song of glimmers in our eyes
Music to wind’s guitar

How beautiful are these words..floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Domzi
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since 2001-09-08

Posts 288
New York (BK)

6 posted 2002-01-25 01:14 PM

Great poem. And the imagery
was beautiful.

Poetry is spiritual ventilation!

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2002-01-25 01:42 PM

Simply love this. Wonderful imagery.
Sandra

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

8 posted 2002-01-25 01:57 PM

love the imagery......excellent collaboration

Charisma

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-01-25 02:55 PM

(sigh) YAY!!! Ooohhhhhh...this is soooooo romantic, sweet friends, you take make a fabulous duet! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friends, this is wonderful! You have such beautiful hearts, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

10 posted 2002-01-25 03:09 PM

thank you sodpassom..grewmouser deserves the credit
for that verse..and im pulling him by his ears
to write again..as he is an wonderful writer

juanita..yes it does ha..im here on the plains
wish i was at the beach

annie..thank you for peeking in hugs

madame..ok i gave mike the credit for the other verse
im glad you enjoyed one of mine haa

thank you floria..glad you enjoyed..i enjoy writing
with my friend mike..

domzi..thank you very much..and for visiting today

sandra..thank you..i could use a day at the beach
in one of these sandcastles haa

thank you charisma..nice to hear from you hugss

noah..thank you...i enjoy writing with mike..
i had to break his arm but i managed to get him to write with me..ha.

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

11 posted 2002-01-26 01:08 AM

Victoria,
Okay...I'm gonna ask. I've avoided it. I've waited. I've hoped. I've stewed. I can't take it anymore. It's killing me. WHAT'S A PHARO? Hmmm?

Oh, I'm sorry, by the way, an other wise delightful write...but I'm distracted by that Pharo thing. I'll take your reply off the air. Sorry I seem to be getting confused. I hope she knows what a Pharo is.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2002-01-26 01:26 AM

The beach is nice...James

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

13 posted 2002-01-26 03:24 AM

Good collaboration.
I am with Larry in that I don't know what a Pharo is. I know faro and Pharoah but not your version.
Good poem
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

14 posted 2002-01-26 09:27 AM

larry..thank you i emailed you so now you know what it is...no more mystery..ha

james..thank dear james

kethry...thank you so much..a pharos is a lighthouse..

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