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My Own Delusion
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My Own Delusion |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Specks in float afore my eyes-- I'm dumb enough to stare at sun. On my back, I'm hypnotized as all creation comes undone. Perhaps it is but specks of dust that float across the lens of eye-- and maybe it's just tears in rust, and how much more than this, am I? My view is just perspective's glare words in climb of spiral stair... preponderance of "something there" enthralled to watch my own demise. Existance as a mere illusion-- convinced that I'm my own delusion. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity...Tears and rust don't tink so much..nor are they so introspective. Deep reach..and well done! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Sweet sister Serenity, we must be warmed by the same sun, yet it is -24F in the sunshine here today! Anyway, tears are good for washing away the dirty dust of the earth. |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Nicely done, Karen! Your images are awesome, and you are too. LOL I kill me. *grins* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Specks in float afore my eyes-- I'm dumb enough to stare at sun. On my back, I'm hypnotized as all creation comes undone. Perhaps it is but specks of dust that float across the lens of eye-- and maybe it's just tears in rust, and how much more than this, am I? ================================= Existance as a mere illusion-- convinced that I'm my own delusion. ================================= too much Pepsi baby? raspberry tea? Sugar rush? rofl youre no delusion...more like a beautiful curse  love this me twin  I'm like a broken record that you can play ... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
To say we all have our own perspective is mere understatement. I really love the way you ended this one, K. Excellent, as always. Michael |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Sooooo sad but beautiful, sweet friend, existance can indeed be an illusion, but as long as we find our place in the sun and be dusted rather in the sunlight and the stardust, we will find true happiness and our delusions will become loving promises! (kiss on cheek) Sooooooo beautifully expressed, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I actually experienced this poem. Yes, that's true! Ha ha, I had some gelly stuff come undone in the back of my eye and saw just what you described! It was a trip, let me tell you I'm sure this is entirely off the subject but it hit me so I had to tell you Kathleen--(Kay) |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Serenity, I really liked your poetry. The last two lines were the perfect closer. Nice job. Cheryl |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
a poem that is a site for sore eyes |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this one Karen! I like the way you layer your writing...excellent. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Yes, I think sometimes we’re all convinced that we’re just our own delusion. And as for that rust in the eyes…damn, I hate when that happens…I figure it’s just me getting old and falling apart though!! If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
"and maybe it's just tears in rust, and how much more than this, am I?" Your writing just amazes me, Karen...wow Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Interesting thoughts, Karen. I think often that life as a whole must be delusion, but who knows. You, my friend, are no delusion, not with this writing you do. Sandra |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
I have so many delusions that I was able to truly feel this poem...when one is lost in so much fantasy love the rust and tears cloud the vision even more. Magnificent poem. I love it. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
I enjoyed the poem and loved the last two lines!Very nice! |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Serenity, I love these lines "Existance as a mere illusion-- convinced that I'm my own delusion." Really enjoyed this one. floria Floria |
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Rodney Belcher Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 227Taylor, Michigan |
Profound...you had me questioning whether I had read or not when I was done...lol...nice work...Rod Nothing ever happens unless first a Dream - Rod |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
serenity, Unless we're all delusional, you're not. We can see you through your words, which, I might add, are often quite extraoridinary( as in this case). Doc |
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