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Marina
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0 posted 2002-01-24 01:46 PM

Cupid's Humour

Past midnight's chime once again
Brainsick is my head with thoughts of you
Torment, and the candle burns on
Incinerating, equal to my heart from our last adieu

Does your very core wail?
For mine sits blacken waiting dawns aurora
Yet no light shall evacuate my pain
Since he mindlessly opened the box of Pandora

Had we not learnt from past affections
That Cupid viciously wheels his laughing dart
Giddy in his thoughts of his poor dupe
While dancing amidst the bleeding heart

Yet no fool is he
So careful to choose the follow up sucker
Plentiful and eager the lonely mortal
Weeping inside for just one more pucker

Useless we are to shield our very beings
For he a leech, like an unwanted tumour
Masquerading as ally to wound the lone
And doomed are we, victims to Cupid's humour

Marina Jan. 22 2002

It is a blessing to have wings for words and passion in pen.

Marina Crossley

Parker
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1 posted 2002-01-24 02:12 PM

This is the most powerful write you've ever written. Bravo on this.... it needs many reads.

James

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-01-24 02:15 PM

Marina this write is incredible!
I'm going back for another read....
Just wanted you to know how much I enjoyed!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

Masked Intruder

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3 posted 2002-01-24 02:23 PM

Excellent! A new take on an old being, simply awesome!

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2002-01-24 02:35 PM

Past midnight's chime once again
Brainsick is my head with thoughts of you
Torment, and the candle burns on
Incinerating, equal to my heart from our last adieu

Does your very core wail?
For mine sits blacken waiting dawns aurora
Yet no light shall evacuate my pain
Since he mindlessly opened the box of Pandora

Had we not learnt from past affections
That Cupid viciously wheels his laughing dart
Giddy in his thoughts of his poor dupe
While dancing amidst the bleeding heart
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Marina this is fantastic writing!!!
Every bit of it....the cadence is dead on...the vocabulary, language and poetic phrasing is superb...the imagery is as deep as the emote...this is a very very cool poem...I love the edge your wrote this from...melacholy, bitter, sarcastic with a slow burn..

Does your very core wail?
For mine sits blacken waiting dawns auror

WOW!! way way cool.
Kiss your muse for this one girlie

Im keeping this one!!

I'm like a broken record that you can play ...
Repeating (as if it matters) ... everything I say.

Gin Blossoms

Mistletoe Angel

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5 posted 2002-01-24 02:52 PM

BRAVO!!! WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this is wonderful, I love the cadence and expression in your words! (sigh) Sometimes the cupid can mistake our hearts, but he will always make up for loves glitches when one true love comes to touch a lovers heart! (kiss on cheek) Soooooooo wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! BRAVO!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Marina, thank you for sharing!

May love and light alwyas shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Michael G
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6 posted 2002-01-24 07:45 PM

and yet cupid, as devilish as he may be, does only start, it takes the rest of us to continue. a wonderful write...........

ellie LeJeune
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7 posted 2002-01-24 07:57 PM

WOW! This cynical twist on old lover boy, cupid... this is superb poetry...bravo! Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Startime
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8 posted 2002-01-24 08:10 PM

Oh gosh...how well I know the humour of cupid and how he leaves hearts sore and wounded....BRAVO!!!This poem is a masterpiece. I love it. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Marina
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Pickering, Ontario

9 posted 2002-01-24 08:38 PM

James, thank you. When of those "write itself poems". PS....I LOVE your new sig. It says a great deal.

Nancy, thank you.  You are too kind.

Masked Inruder, thank you so much.  Perhaps a little different..yes.

Jan, Hey Girl!!  You know how much I love your replies.  Thank you soooo much!

Noah, thank you very much and once again you have been far to generous with your compiments.

Michael, your words are very true.  Makes you wonder why we do what we do...doesn't it?  Thanks for your reply.

Ellie, thank you for stopping in and reading.

Startime, I think you all have felt his wrath at one time or another...Thank you.

It is a blessing to have wings for words and passion in pen.

Marina Crossley

[This message has been edited by Marina (01-24-2002 08:39 PM).]

Honeybee
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10 posted 2002-01-24 10:15 PM

Very, very well expressed with creative phrasing and images. *Sighs* I've been a victim of Cupid far too many times, he seems to enjoy giving me frogs!

This one's a keeper

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

doreen peri
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Virginia

11 posted 2002-01-24 10:53 PM

cupid has no sense of humor
bow is bent and arrow aimed...
and i heard this awful rumor
cupid can't be ever tamed!!!!!

hehe..

enjoyed your writing... made me smile...

passing shadows
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12 posted 2002-01-25 05:55 AM

WhooHoo! Very nice, I so enjoyed it!

sodpossom
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13 posted 2002-01-25 11:08 AM

Very cleverly written.As clever as old cupid.Enjoyed it!

Marina
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Pickering, Ontario

14 posted 2002-01-25 02:55 PM

Thank you, Melissa,Doreen, passing shadows and sodpossum. Your replies are as always, greatly appreciated.

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words and passion in pen.

Marina Crossley

Temptress

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Mobile, AL

15 posted 2002-01-25 05:32 PM

Cupid with a sense of humor? He must have a sick one when it comes to me...well..that is..except for lately! Ohhh...geesh..LOL! I'm gonna get in trouble for that one!

I can just hear him!

Sooo..
Another excellent poem that I wish I could equal the power and potency of, Lady. I love it!

A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale

16 posted 2002-01-25 08:18 PM

what can I say that everyone else hasn't? this truly is a great write.

Marina
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Pickering, Ontario

17 posted 2002-01-25 08:31 PM

Temptess and A whispers Caress, thank you both for reading and replying.

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words and passion in pen.

Marina Crossley

Parker
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18 posted 2002-01-26 12:24 PM

I can't say enough about this write Marina.
Each read is better then the last and every verse is a gem, a truly inspirational write.

Parker

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