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Unforgiven
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Unforgiven |
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Vacuity Junior Member
since 2002-01-22
Posts 12 |
My past full of disgrace Unforgiven, it lives inside Water running down my back My heart full of love I lack Unforgiven, alone it hides Blood running down my arms All your pain I can see Unforgiven, you stand aside Snow falling in our path Our time here fading fast Unforgiven, your heart confides My walls falling all around We can't stand being apart Unforgiven, our love survives |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Such a heartaching write, sweet friend, I hope now the hate has subsided and compassion and forgiveness has come and now love has returned to your heart with trust and hope! (kiss on cheek) Soooooo very expressive, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Claire, thank you for sharing!    May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Vacuity - read this and liked what I read. Very different in the presentation. I'll look for more of yours... BC |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is a very unique and clever write, in its presentation & its rhyme scheme. Strong haunting imagery, analogies and emote. Powerful poetry. Well done Vacuity. I'm like a broken record that you can play ... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
A powerful poem...great write, Claire! Nathan |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Hatred pouring from our hearts We can't stand being apart Unforgiven, our love survives This verse alone is enough to shatter even the coldest heart...~sigh~ Very sad... |
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