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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2002-01-23 01:20 AM

Too many notes--
I self-destruct...
four quarter time
as I conduct
a symphony
of "pity me..."
in search of proof
that I'm enough.

"Hold me."
(I'm a eulogy.)
"Sustain..."
(I am the death of me.)
I cannot Handel
me...alone.
Too many sins
to be atoned.

I, upon a raft,
bereft,
hallucinating
oasis
in the waves
of sea of sand--
a homesteader
in nomad's land.

Unguarded, I stand--
naked--BARE--
mere ghost of woman
once aware;
I can't greet
your eyes, I fear,
within your lies,
I'll disappear.

[This message has been edited by serenity (01-23-2002 02:04 AM).]

peppermint35
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1106
Texas, USA

1 posted 2002-01-23 03:43 AM

Oh WOW, serenity... this really grabbed me!!!

As always, love your writing

Hugz,

Pepper
"A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth."
Percy Bysshe Shelley

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2002-01-23 05:33 AM

Still, calm yourself to motionless,
Let your anxiety protest.
Hum a little Bach or Tull
Don’t let the events pull.

Wrap your arms around your arms
Focus on your own inner charm
Sitting on a Park Bench still
Let the peace of being fill

Dress yourself with yourself
Take down that smile on the shelf
Grab hold of all your emotion
Make your own elation.

Gloom

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2002-01-23 06:54 AM

"I, upon a raft,
bereft,
hallucinating
oasis
in the waves
of sea of sand--
a homesteader
in nomad's land."

Oh Serenity ... your words are always so powerful! An amazing write, that's packed with thought-filled imagery. Excellent!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-01-23 07:48 AM

Too many notes--
I self-destruct...
four quarter time
as I conduct
a symphony
of "pity me..."
in search of proof
that I'm enough.
"Hold me."
(I'm a eulogy.)
"Sustain..."
(I am the death of me.)
I cannot Handel
me...alone.
Too many sins
to be atoned.
============================
the rhyme divine ....the mirrors.
oh and me twin..."youre enough" ..but remember ...
always leave them wanting more

I'm like a broken record that you can play ...
Repeating (as if it matters) ... everything I say.

Gin Blossoms

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-01-23 08:35 AM

BRAVO!!! Such a powerfully expressed poem, sweet friend, may your pity be replaced by comfort and faith and may you conduct a symphony of comfort and pride to follow! (kiss on cheek) WOW!!! Your words always amaze me, sweet friend, you are soooooo talented! We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2002-01-23 11:58 AM

pepper, I am grateful for your kindness. Thank you.

"A"--make my own elation! Now why didn't I think of that? grinning, thank you my friend!

Kit, you are very generous. I always appreciate it and am delighted when you "pop in" Thank you.

Janet...you are so dear to me. Love you.

Sweet Noah, thanks for sending all that love and light. It must be working, the sun is shining again today! Hugs and

!

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

7 posted 2002-01-23 12:06 PM

Dear Serenity. I don't know how I missed this first time around. I love the play on words. wonderful poem.

Floria
"learning, always learning."

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2002-01-23 01:15 PM

Serenity,
Powerful write. I can see the fires below the bridge. Enjoyed

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