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Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

0 posted 2002-01-20 12:31 PM

Still In Shadow

As I close my eyes to sleep
I let vision take it's form
Into self-made dream I leap
and the world I now transform

On a beach of golden sands
I walk beneath midnight moon
Weaving as desire commands
as waves play sweet lover’s tune

Soft breezes caress my skin
with the warmth of summer night
Now the magic will begin
and my passions will ignite

As a mist of turquoise green
starts to gather on the beach
A man now enters the scene
eyes filled with love his arms reach

In shadow his face is still
for I know him not as yet
This night my need he’ll fulfill
grant wishes I won’t forget

Spent the night in dreamers land
making love until the dawn
Then walk the beach hand in hand
kiss farewell and then we’re gone

Karen Torbiak 2002

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

[This message has been edited by Startime (01-20-2002 12:33 PM).]

brianbeaudry
Member

since 2001-07-20

Posts 410
Northern Ontario Canada

1 posted 2002-01-20 12:36 PM

The imagery...the passion...the intensity....finally the rapture....You have penned a delicious piece dear friend!!!!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-01-20 12:36 PM

(sigh) Sooooooo sad but beautiful, sweet friend, I hope really soon that the love of your life will stay with you forever and you will walk the beaches always hand in hand and find happiness forever and ever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shin eupon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (01-20-2002 12:37 PM).]

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2002-01-20 12:38 PM

This was so dreamy!
I really loved where you took this
and all the romance you captured.

So pretty Startime~

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2002-01-20 01:04 PM

When I think of a beach I automatically think of
romance. So of course I adore this piece you've penned

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

5 posted 2002-01-20 01:07 PM

enjoyed

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

6 posted 2002-01-20 02:03 PM

You never run out of beautiful words startime."as waves play sweet lover’s tune"
another lovely one , floria

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2002-01-20 05:44 PM

I think you should be called "Beautiful Dreamer"
You seem to have the same hopes and fantasies of the perfect situation as I do. I wish we could quit dreaming and start living them, though.
Love this.
Sandra

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2002-01-20 06:49 PM

Hope those dreams become reality for you...James

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

9 posted 2002-01-20 07:45 PM

(bowing humbly) Oh Mistress of the romance
and sensuality of PiP...I bow to you. Your
excellence astounds me...

Very good Karen....watch out for those men
now....especially ones you have not seen...

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

10 posted 2002-01-20 10:09 PM

You keep writing like this, Karen, and he'll find you in no time!!! LOL. Loved this!!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

11 posted 2002-01-20 10:48 PM

Startime...Another passionate, fiery poem from the pen of a truly romantic poetess. WONDERFUL WRITING, DEAR FRIEND.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

12 posted 2002-01-20 10:58 PM

So very romantic and passionate, Karen...
Lucky is the woman who can write her own dreams.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

poeticdreamer
Junior Member

since 2002-01-17

Posts 46

13 posted 2002-01-21 12:18 PM

Someday a soldier from southern mountains will grasp your loving hand! poeticdreamer

poetryinmotion
Member

since 2002-01-14

Posts 61
mass

14 posted 2002-01-21 12:45 PM

this is such a beautiful poem. very romantic. gets you right in the heart. i loved it. love Alice

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

15 posted 2002-01-21 12:54 PM

Startime - this is one of the most moving romantic poems I've read in a very long time. I can't say enough about it to you...

BC

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

16 posted 2002-01-21 02:35 AM

You have the most delicious dreams, Karen. We are so lucky you share them with us! This one is particularly magical, full of sensual, passionate images. BRAVO!!!
BTW, do you give dreaming lessons?

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

17 posted 2002-01-21 02:59 AM

I know this too well.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

18 posted 2002-01-21 09:25 AM

you dream so well with words *s

nice, very nice Karen
hugss

M

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

19 posted 2002-01-21 10:01 AM

so soft and so dreamy penned, love the imagery, love the passions and love the whole poem.....

Charisma

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

20 posted 2002-01-21 10:12 AM

You've written dreams of my past Karen. lol......dreams come true sweetie, may yours also come true soon!!

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

GenXer
Senior Member

since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

21 posted 2002-01-21 10:10 PM

Karen - Sounds like a dream where you didn't want that darn alarm clock to go off. Great rhythm and imagery in this one, and, of course, very romantic. Nicely done.

Dave

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