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The Phone
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The Phone |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas 
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I'm sitting here alone tonight- Another motel room. The ticking of my bedside clock, Loud as the crack of doom... The phone justs sits there silent. I long to reach and dial... Regretfully, I put it down... And sit here for awhile. Austin is a lovely town- But it is not my own... I sit here bored and lonely, By the silent telephone. I long to hear your lovely voice, But that would not be fair... To offer what can never be, So I'll just leave it there. I pour a cup of coffee- Look out at old Ben White- And glare in anger at the phone, Which is so quiet tonight... There! I almost did it- But what could I have said? I think that I'll unplug the phone- And then I'll go to bed. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Such longing and loneliness expressed in this. A phone that never rings or an email that is never sent....both are like a cold windy night on the trail without a blanket or warm coat. Do you like music? maybe go to an Austin City Limits show. Peace to you, John. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
go to 6th street I say yuh but I actually never been anywhere but through Austin on my way to other places. Been through there a bunch tho yuh. Sounds like your poem is real! |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Very adept use of rhyme and meter. It flows in a way that strengthens your poem and amplifies the mood you creare and communicate. Very good poem. Hope to see more of your work. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
John Good rhyme, good meter, good idea. Enjoyed the read. |
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Mac Attack Member
since 2001-12-12
Posts 100Ontario, Canada |
Wow. Who ever she is to make your phone so silent, I hope she knows what she's missing out on. Truly a good, and sorrow filled read. |
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