Open Poetry #18 |
Rebirth (Rewritten) |
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Rebirth I woke in alabaster dawn The landscape fully etched in white Where ice tipped pen so finely drawn Across the woods and winter lawn Had frosted limbs in chill of night Glistening, the woodland now With wonderland of crystal trees Wrapping tones of gray and brown In sequin studded pearly gown That covers life’s impurities Bleakness comes and harshly changes Views embraced in nature’s fold Life abruptly rearranges And rewrites the silk white phrases Hidden in a paper’s fold In every season of our sorrow Nature in its time bestows Splendors that the heart may borrow Into hours of tomorrow Laced in gleaming ice and snows Ivory flakes in mounds of glitter Laid so softly on the earth Cover memories cold and bitter And bestow much greater worth To this sweet dawn, my soul’s rebirth Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (01-19-2002 04:56 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Soooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, may His blanket weigh all our troubles down and may we rise to new happiness and hope in His love! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, this is sooooooo beautiful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
rebirth is such a beautiful thing, isnt it? you are as beautiful as your words and more. Gob bless Love is God. Love is war. Love is what your life is for. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Crystal clear and so soft and beautiful, all of it!! |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Beautiful rewrite. -Silver Streak Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Your union of metaphors between these human emotions and nature are superlative Liz. There is one good thing about having a rebirth, you get to know just how good the good really is, as you have experience the bad. Excellent! ~* CARPE' DIEM *~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Liz, so beautiful your words. Wonderful the metaphors. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Morcastlin Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 244The Jersey Shore, USA |
Ah, this is pure poetic bliss! Exquisite rhyme and meter! Beautifully worded! Pure bliss!!! Love, Bonnie |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Elizabeth, another wonderful snow poem. I love these lines"Life abruptly rearranges And rewrites the silk white phrases Hidden in a paper’s fold" fabulous write, floria |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Elizabeth, I don't know for the life of my why you'd rewrite your already perfect work... Then I read it, and it's beyond perfection... |
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