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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2002-01-18 09:25 PM

The Maiden’s Way

She pulled open drapes, allowed in the day
Then smiled as the sunbeams gave up their rays,
She watched as neighbors went about their chores
Then leaned into age, eight decades and more

No one was about to hear her complain
She duly endorsed ignoring her pain
Arthritic hands could still open a jar
As with her bright hopes she counted on stars

Music, news and chatter filled her airwaves,
Slowly fingering old photos she’d saved,
Read bits of letters from yesterday’s past
Wondered how time had sped by her so fast

Nieces and nephews, her cousins galore
Write to her often, on holidays, more;
They are her family, for them, she prays,
Going about life in Old Maiden ways

She greets all children as hers on the block
They stand around her, engage in small talk
She listens as desires and dreams emerge
She gives each a dollar ~ something to splurge

She tends to her flowers, rids ground of weeds
From her dried posies, removes future’s seed.
A moment’s ponder, on seeds of her own
What they'd be like, had they been sown.

For fate had sent love along her path’s way
He had put country first, went the next day
The attack had been swift, he’d been as fast
For military might steeped his young past.

His kiss? A promise; her pledge was his start.
“Never my dear will we be so apart,
as not to know when the other’s heart sings,”
Then he left after bestowing his ring.

Time passed to a morn when the sun shone bright
Swift blackened when grim news faded all light
Her ring flickered through her great flow of tears
Her heart was so sore, but not from her fears.

For all she could feel from the very start
Was this fullest feeling warm in her heart
“You will know indeed love when my heart sings,
you’ll know it each time you look at my ring.”

~*~

She pulls open drapes, allows in the day
Then smiles as the sunbeams give up their rays,
She watches as neighbors go about their chores
She leans into age, eight decades and more

No one is about to hear her complain
She duly endorses ignoring her pain
Arthritic hands move about as she sings
Of a promise, a pledge, a slender ring.

©Karilea Rilling Jungel
18 January 2002

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (01-20-2002 10:58 AM).]

Silver Streak
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1 posted 2002-01-18 09:28 PM

Beautifully done, as usual. Love your echo.

-newell

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

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Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-01-18 09:37 PM

Ahhh Karilea! Just beautiful...such a tender write. Into my library it goes!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

Madame Chipmunk
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3 posted 2002-01-18 09:44 PM

A poem as gentle as a flower, Karilea...
and full of the wisdom of the ages.
Truly a gem!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

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4 posted 2002-01-18 09:54 PM

Oh Sunshine, This is simply devine and it is going into my library. Thankyou for this one. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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5 posted 2002-01-18 10:02 PM

(sigh) Soooooooo beautiful and tender, sweet friend, what a beautiful promise that beacons from the heart in this gorgeous verse! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous, I too am adding this to my library because it's wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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6 posted 2002-01-19 01:46 AM

Karilea, this is so romantic and beautiful. You are an incredible story teller, I could read these all day. So many images, all so tenderly painted with your artistic pen. Thank you for sharing this.

Nan

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7 posted 2002-01-20 10:50 AM

Much of this poem just seems to be about my own mother... She's there - sitting and watching - watching and sitting...

You've captured "The Maiden's Way".. for sure... Nicely done, m'friend...

Marsha

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8 posted 2002-01-20 10:57 AM

Kari darling sister of my soul I suppose you think that I’m going to praise you to the skies? Hmmm? …….. Well, of course I am, this is utterly utterly wonderful as YOU very well know.

This is really fabulous writing sometimes when you don’t expect it showers of moonbeams descend on you. They dropped like little twinkles of delight when I read this. Oh my eyes they are refreshed and my soul is washed in joy this is sooooooooo beautiful.

Absolutely first class writing

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1

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9 posted 2002-01-20 11:03 AM

Sunshine - Truly a great piece of poetry. Nicely done.

Dave

Logan
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10 posted 2002-01-20 03:48 PM

Ahh, Sissie. You could have written this for an old great aunt of mine. Thanks for bringing back some memories of time of when...very gentle smile

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11 posted 2002-01-20 04:51 PM

Sunshine, this poem shines just like your name does. floria

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12 posted 2002-01-20 04:59 PM

Karilea, I don't know if you based this on a person you know, but if you did, you have sung her life beautifully.

Traci

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Eph. 2:8-9

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13 posted 2002-01-20 05:05 PM

beautiful!!!!

wish I had the right words, to tell how I like this wonderful poem.

((hugs))
Charisma

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14 posted 2002-01-20 05:16 PM

This is incredibly beautiful. I confess I could picture this lady vividly in my minds eye. A very touching write.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Irish Rose
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15 posted 2002-01-20 05:35 PM

I wonder if we don't all know someone like this. This touched my heart deep down.
Karilea, I also want to thank you again for your kindness and encouragement in my poetry. It really means a lot to me.

This is a keeper!

Kathleen--(Kay)
A true friend does not love you for who you are, but in spite of who you are." -- Caroline Tran

Mac Attack
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16 posted 2002-01-20 06:32 PM

Fantastic! Great topic, great execution, great writing. I loved this.

Mysteria

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17 posted 2002-01-20 08:28 PM

Now I know you know where this is being read on Thursday, and it is definitely going into my book too! That could be any one of us one day, Karilea, and you gave her grace, showed her emotions, but more importantly, I felt the love of life she has for she carries on every day in perhaps the same pattern. Oh dear rambing, but you know this one I will hold so close to my heart.

~* CARPE' DIEM *~

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