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. . . Remove from me...
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. . . Remove from me... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Remove from me this rapier blade with which thou hath pierced my heart. Let me enjoy, once again, exquisite pain and revel in my own agony. Withdraw, slowly, so my life’s blood will run down the cold, sharp blade and drip to the ground. Mayhap in a rose garden that it should not be wasted as were my dreams. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, my goodness....this is somewhat gothic. My, my, it is a bit dark but vivid. I think I will be reading this one again... 'Fiction is the truth inside the lie.' ~Stephen King |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Let me enjoy, once again, exquisite pain and revel in my own agony." I like this from you  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Die not, fair poet for thy words give life to dreams--as seed to others and in turn they might be a welcome respite for THEE... smiling, missed ya lovie! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
**big hugs** I don't know how else to respond to the pain in this poem.  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Grr I was just about to reply to your poem a few mins ago but my comp crashed due to the storm we are having over here! I like this poem, a lot, raw emotion going down the page! It's good to see expression like this. feel better soon ((warm hugs)) RP |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
"Mayhap in a rose garden that it should not be wasted as were my dreams." Interloper - I liked this one very much. Definitely could feel the sadness and the regret in every word. Dave |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very Shakespearian....good imagery.... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, ouch..this sounds more painful to hve the sword removed than to leave it there.. Good question ,hmmm.. (A rose garden seems like a good place, Count) Sandra |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) This is so sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and your pain! (sigh) Don't let the pain get to you, believe in yourself and this will all pass and joy will again fill you! Write it out, for friends are always here for you! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow, quite the write here Interloper. Gut wrenching and powerful imagary. Good to see you back here again If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW Interloper! This is a change for you...I like this...deep, powerful, great imagery. YES!! *missed you* ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
InterLoper~ Quite effectively done~ Enjoyable read, my friend~ I'll e-mail you my 'favorite line' ... Tee-hee~ Love ya' *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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BrightStar Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 219 |
Oh ----- my! Bumpity! Admiring you at Passions. |
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