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Wild And Free |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada 
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Wild And Free She wanders unseen through her forest home not known by blind eyed men that she is there Thus she has been left wild and free to roam, the knowledge of man’s laws she's unaware To live beneath a canopy of green quiet tranquillity fills heart and soul Even the nervous doe here feels serene as together they take evening stroll Passion for life and living flows in veins like hot sap in springtime running through trees Restless urge fills her when feeling warm rains with caress that heats body by degrees No longer just the peaceful wood she seeks but desire for a mate her heart now speaks Karen Torbiak 2002© Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. [This message has been edited by Startime (01-16-2002 03:51 PM).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Wild And Free She wanders unseen through her forest home not known by blind eyed men that she is there Thus she has been left wild and free to roam without the knowledge of man’s rules aware To live beneath a canopy of green quiet tranquillity fills heart and soul Even the nervous doe here feels serene as together they take evening stroll Passion for life and living flows in veins like hot sap in springtime running through trees Restless urge fills her when feeling warm rains with caress that heats body by degrees No longer just the peaceful wood she seeks but desire for a mate her heart now speaks ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Hot sap??? Oh My God! Restless urge??? degrees??? This creature is NOT after redwood, believe me!! karen, this makes me want to take up forestry  Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Sooooooo beautifully said, sweet friend, I know just how you feel...wanting someone to share this entire world with, to grace the forests and the beaches and all the mountains of life! (big hugggssssss) Very soon this love will come to you, sweet friend, then it will be so exciting to see what adventurous love poems you write! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Karen Oh yes, the call of the wild during mating season. Your words are beautiful. I could feel myself in the serene forest looking at the deer. |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Karen,gosh darn it you have such a beautiful way with words.Here I am writing about outhouses and you`re writing beautiful poetry.    Juanita |
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His Poet Senior Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 750 |
Karen, this is nature at its best. I see a wood nymph darting through the forest. I hardly ever make a suggestion but see what you think. On the last line of the first verse, I stumbled a little. Does this sound smoother? The knowledge of man's rules, she was unaware |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Kay...*giggling wickedly* I just knew you would get the vision of this poem. **big hugs** Noah...thank you...I so love your sweet comments they are always so loving. **big hugs** Ariana...I love the forest, mountains and oceans so I try to put them into as much of my poetry as possible...I am so glad you liked it. **big hugs** Juanita...if I could write something to make people laugh like you do I would be very pleased...but my talent doesn't expand as much as yours does. Thank you, dear one. **big hugs** Cheryl...thank you for the suggestion...I did make a change but had to adjust to go with the count..Thank you so much for the idea..it feels much better now. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Karen - lovely gracious words. Your style is excellent, and I love to read your poetry... BC |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Wonderully written poetry, Karen. So beautiful and yet, technically superb. -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Karen...a soft, slightly sensual...well written and visual sonnet with your own mystical qualities within it...Beautifully done...Great Job Lady... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Ah to be so free. And yet, even she, longs for a special partner.. This is beautiful, Karen. Sandra |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This was wonderful, Karen. Free is good, but can be lonely at times. We all need to feel loved. Nicely done. All writing comes |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Clap clap clap. just beautiful Karen as always. floria |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dear Karen; You are an incredibly beautiful poet! This is so full of hope and the promise of new love! Exquisite! Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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poetryinmotion Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 61mass |
hi Startime. this is a wonderful poem. i live in the country. i see deer and all kinds of great animals. great job on this poem. well written. love Alice  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hot sap? Hmm. What a wild and free romantic piece this one is Karen. It's gorgeous! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Karen, this is so beautiful. I love the subject matter....of course, being a chipmunk....I also appreciate your meaning. The forest is a beauiful, wild and free place, full of creatures who are wild and free also. Excellent work!  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
absolutely beautiful |
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