Open Poetry #18 |
Eternity and Me |
Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Eternity and Me There is a day not far away As minutes and hours may claim A speck of time not even worth A moment for the moon to wane A distant star upon the rise With a voice that speaks my name Whispered in the night, far away About a future, I hope to claim As seconds pause on every clock They’ve lost the will, to move And hours crawl, at eons pace Delaying my lips, from touching you Infinite is a second, when love Is away from its other flame Even the dust of dying stars Seems short to a heart in pain But brief is time to the outer world Like a tear in a storm at sea And I’ll be there just a month away A month, an eternity, an eternity to me. James Parker Haley Jan 16, 2002 |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
A distant star upon the rise With a voice that speaks my name Whispered in the night, far away About a future, I hope to claim But brief is time to the outer world Like a tear in a storm at sea And I’ll be there just a month away A month, an eternity, an eternity to me ___________________________________________ This says a lot to me Park. Mainly it says someone is a lucky girl! I hate it when I have to wait for something, even a day or two can seem like forever. Beautiful write, my friend. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A speck of time not even worth A moment for the moon to wane A distant star upon the rise With a voice that speaks my name Whispered in the night, far away About a future, I hope to claim ====================================== Infinite is a second, when love Is away from its other flame Even the dust of dying stars Seems short to a heart in pain ================================================ *marking in day planner* ... one month ... Arch ...bring pedestals ROFL Ahh P-man this is so lovley...the poetic phrasing is delightful as is your cadence... this just dances and rolls off the tongue when read aloud Classic poetry here...the ache...the conflict...the imagery ...the hope ... the moon... all adds up to a P-man penned swoon I love this line: Even the dust of dying stars Seems short to a heart in pain now how gorgeous is that...."the dust of dying stars" ... oh man!!! You worked the metaphor of time in this to poetic perfection. Very very nice write P-man..very nice indeed. Even thru the darkest phase, be it thick or thin |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, love is never far away, and you shall be embraced with eternity someday, to last forever and a day! (big hugggsssss) You are sooooooo romantic, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet James, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Very beautifully written! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Ohhhhh Parker this poem is precious.... Hugs2uPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
This is some great writing here, I loved it! Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh this brought so many things to mind, but the thing is brought most to mind was what someone said to me once "no timetables" if we could only "feel" eternity! This poem speaks so clearly to that. I enjoyed, very much Kathleen--(Kay) |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* this is so beautiful...it sang with the music of the stars as I read it...Your ability with words is stunning....you weave magic with your pen. A mere second can seem like an eternity when we are in love. BRAVO!!! I love it. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
A distant star upon the rise With a voice that speaks my name Whispered in the night, far away About a future, I hope to claim As seconds pause on every clock They’ve lost the will, to move And hours crawl, at eons pace Delaying my lips, from touching you Infinite is a second, when love Is away from its other flame Even the dust of dying stars Seems short to a heart in pain ======================================== *sigh*....yes...youve taken the scribbles from my pen, and put them here..you do write them better than i..lol time does seem to stand still doesnt it...."even the dust of dying stars seems short" compared to the waiting.....wow..what a way to put it...! soon...everything comes about eventually.. the wait will fade into oblivion.....soon... hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Dee, thanks .... I hope there's a lucky guy in this story too. Janet, thank you. I'll meet you at the arch. Noah, thanks. sodpossom, thank you. CocoBaci, thank you too. Randy, thanks very much. Irish Rose, thanks. I agree no time tables. StarTime, thank you muchly. dg, thank you. and yes I hate waiting. I like the attitude, just go for it, the moment is now. Oblivion be damned. Parker |
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