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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-11-26 10:53 PM

Everything I want to know
is hidden in your eyes--
no show...
Tell me all
the hidden text
between the lines--
of simple sex...
Midas touch me into gold--
as always, I am too complex.

Tell me everything I seek
the pieces missing that I need
to complete the rest of me
the one, the complicated piece
(and its cut is oh-so strange--
colored puddles re-arranged...)
and yet it IS--it's all a game
the stillness,
serenity of same....

I can only write cliche'--
satin lips and hips that sway
that certain taste, exquisite smell--
If heaven be where angels dwell
and should I find you without wing
no halo or the choirs of sing
Then give to me the choice of Hell...
for where you be?
I will ring bells.
Understanding, angel's fall--
for you? I would not be at all.
I'd give up my identitiy
and chop my wings, most willingly.

I need to be held in your arms--
I want so much this witch be charmed.
I have already cried the tears
and fell upon love's sharpened spear.
(I love you...)
and I can love some more...
my love to you,
an open door.

Elizabeth

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Member Ascendant

since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

1 posted 2001-11-26 11:10 PM

He'll walk right through the door....beautiful, Karen.

God bless America, my home sweet home.

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 2001-11-26 11:11 PM

wonderful. . . flowing and delicate. . .

one of your best. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

NapalmsConstantlyConfused

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 529

3 posted 2001-11-26 11:12 PM

beautiful and evocative. i like it!
-dave

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2001-11-26 11:25 PM

You do make the most seductive invities, You musthave the men quite enamored. Such an honor it would be to combine a poem with you ANYTIME,just ask, and i wil give it my best shot,
PEACE
sandra

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-11-27 12:20 PM

"I can only write cliche'--"
==========================
NOT

If this intense passionate write of anticipation is cliche'...
then bring it on baby....
and I have just one question???
DOES HE HAVE A BROTHER?????

"and its cut is oh-so strange--
colored puddles re-arranged...)
and yet it IS--it's all a game
the stillness,
serenity of same....

I can only write cliche'--
satin lips and hips that sway
that certain taste, exquisite smell--
======================================
I need to be held in your arms--
I want so much this witch be charmed.
I have already cried the tears
and fell upon love's sharpened spear.
(I love you...)
and I can love some more...
my love to you,
an open door"
=====================

Vials baby...VIAlS

he said ... "dont cry" ...
said "it only hurts forever ... and all we have is time."

~Tabitha's Secret~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2001-11-27 01:20 AM

"I love you...and I can love some more."
Enjoyed this...James

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2001-11-27 07:05 AM

Everything I want to know
is hidden in your eyes--
no show...
Tell me all
the hidden text
between the lines--
of simple sex...
Midas touch me into gold--
as always, I am too complex.

I could have written this last week....but never the way you expressed it...very fine writing here.

~Wynter

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2001-11-27 07:08 AM

"Understanding, angel's fall--
for you? I would not be at all.
I'd give up my identitiy
and chop my wings, most willingly."

Oh my ... Serenity, this was a powerfully emotive write! Very well expressed, much enjoyed the beautiful phrasing, and the strong emotion through these lines!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

9 posted 2001-11-27 07:17 AM

This sings along of deep feelings, deep love. I love the way you’ve put this together. Do you have a magic pen to write such incredible verses?

I can only write cliche'--
satin lips and hips that sway

You are so far from writing cliché Karen. So far.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

10 posted 2001-11-27 09:20 AM

"where you be?" hehe...

i be right here! open says a me!

this dor's ajar!! it's the blind man who can't see it which is why he hasn't walked right in and made himself comfortable!

oh... whoops!! this isn't about ME,is it? lol... *grin

well, you know i have a hard time telling us apart so oh well... forgive me, ok? loved the lyrical verse you wrote here

just bought jagger's new single CD.... "gooddess in the doorway".... it's awesome!! gonna write myself a pome by that title in my honor... well, it will be "goddess in the dorway" ... too many o's.... hmm... come to think of it, you can never have too many o's can you...

but anyway, i better quit rambling here and stay on topic... because i don't want the moderators to move my thread because i broke a rule or anything... *wink*... huh? what's that? you say YOU are a moderator?... geesh.. i forgot

loved your pome, harpo... really and truly... it rocks!!

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

11 posted 2001-11-27 09:47 AM

Elizabeth? I'm afraid the open door thing is a metaphor. I would not suggest that anyone else try walking through my door these days. (I'm dangerous when I'm jumpy!)

Thanks for reading, lovie!

Sven...I appreciate the compliment tho the "one of your best" always confuses me...I sure as hell am no judge of that. But thanks, Sveetie!

Dave, "evocative"---me likes that! grin...better than my usual "invocative"

Thank you, my friend!

Sandra? We'll have to make an icq date (I write better that way than through e mail as I tend to write fast, so let's get together and chat and see what we can come up with!

JM---I always feel cliche' after reading other's work...cliche'...hell, I feel like an ANACRONISM....grrr....thank you my twin. Me wuvs you!

James? And I can back that up with testimony---er...once he recovers!

Thank you!

Wynter...sometimes the silences are just thoughts being birthed. Just give yourself a break sometimes, k? Thank you.

Tracey? no magic pen...just fascinated by people and they inspire me...kind of annoys the boyfriend? but hey? He inspires me too...lol...you should read some of the rage I write sometimes....rofl! Thank you!

Lord have mercy Dor....whatever would happen if we got together in the same city? *laughing at the thought* I hear the National Guard is kind of busy right now, so we may have to wait a bit!

But then again....they could probably due with a bit of fun too! (THERE GOES NATIONAL SECURITY!!!)
Love ya lucy!

Love and thanks to all!

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

12 posted 2001-11-27 07:10 PM

k...daily you amaze me how talented you are...but today you have out done yourself...this poem shines...helen

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