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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
 In sleepless nights she enters in the enchanted world of fantasy dreams yet all alone with tears in flow that rest upon her beating chest she lingers in remembering when love was kind to her... This place known in dreams to her where she has found herself some peace without pretense or fist of fear just faith that life will treat her fair when one day she will touch upon the hand of understand releasing her in flight to soar trusting her heart to love once more... *~coco~* [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-26-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes it does seems to require trust...I always wonder if it is real...or just something I am creating in my mind that will soon all fall apart...James |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
James, indeed it does come down2trust... Hugs2uMyPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I felt such incredible sorrow in this poem - as I felt it spoke the dreams of every woman held in a bad relationship through either fear, or jealousy. (well this is what I read from it), and the best part, and one I certainly could identify with, was the choice one finally makes for themself which I read from these lines that I loved (as the hand of understand is the key to freedom)~ she will touch upon the hand of understand releasing her in flight to soar Coco - fantastic poem, can you tell I loved it?   ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ [This message has been edited by Mysteria (edited 11-26-2001).] |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
You do express it so well, well done, take care! "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sweet Coco, may you find this happiness you seek. Lovely poetry here. Sandra I took a walk around the world to ease my troubled mind-I left my body lying somewhere in the sands of time. (3 Doors Down) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ahhh yes, trust and then finding the strength in yourself to accept that you do deserve to hold the happiness as we all do. Beautiful piece here my friend and as always, I find the smoothness of your cadence so very pleasing when I read your works. Excellent writing all the way around. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I especially like: without pretense or fist of fear There are some prepositions that could be removed to fine tune this, but it has a lovely message. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Coco this is so soft and heartfelt.... I just loved it. and hey! nice pic my dear so nice to get to put a face with your name |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
MYSTERIA, thank you from the bottom of my heart for your precious words mean alot2me... EAGLE1, it's really nice2see you popped by and2uPoetFriend I send lotz of smiles... CAT(Sandra), your're one sweet lady yourself ya know and thank you for letting me know you took a peak at this... MARK, it's really great2see you stopped by and your comments that I read this morning are greatly appreciated hugs2uFriend... VAS, you're soooooo sweet2let me know your thoughts on this, as last nite I just sat at keyboard listening2some mp3's and honestly didn't really put much thought in2 the structure of it (ie: prepositions) so I thank you for pointing this out2me (my english kinda gets off trac sometimes) and I send ya smilesNhugs PoetFriend... SEA, sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeetSea MUAHHHHHHHH on cheekz2uPoetFriend you're a gem! *~coco~* |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
very very pretty piece ever deep...runs |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I could feel the sorrow and the yearn. You are going to find out the meaning of pure happiness real real soon. I know you will! (hugs) |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Simple lovely my friend - and nice to "see you too". Though about putting my mug up there but it would probably empty the place so think I'll stick to words...much nicer. Again, my friend, really enjoyed this piece. jwesley |
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Abigaile Member
since 2001-10-21
Posts 112San Mateo, CA |
This really brought a tear to my eye. Very touching. It can be difficult to let yourself love again, but I have found that is is worth it. *BIG SMILE* I hope you find your happiness, too. "I am nae poet, in a sense; |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Yes, free to love once again. I love it! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
AWC, those are kind words you say and I thank you sweetie... RP, thanx4taking a peak in here and ya know I gotta tell ya that when approaching that intersection of choices2be made somehow the fearNtrust issues cloak one in a haze and instead of the direct path you end up taking comfort in the long way around BUT eventually get2the destination in due time if ya know what I mean and I believe you do... my heart sends out hugz2U... JW, you make me giggleeeeeeeeeeee what a sense of humourUgot there and as4your commenting on poem Merci mon ami... ABIGAILE, nice2meetUpoetFriend and I thank you for sharing your thoughts on this poem with me2day... INTERLOPER, your response has me swirling in enthusiasm sweetie muahhhh on cheekz2uPoetFriend *~coco~* [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-26-2001).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
well done PoetFriend Coco. . . a wonderful musing from your pen. . . great job. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is a lovely piece. Speaks of past sorrows, but still with hope for a new love to wash away the past hurts. I like this a lot. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I felt a positive sense of direction in this, in spite of some past sadness that bleeds through. Keep dreaming of a fair future: "without pretense or fist of fear just faith that life will treat her fair" |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
CocoBaci - what a warm, tender, and romantic writing. I just loved it, and need to be there also... BC |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
SvenDear, it mean's so much2me2see you pass thru here and like I saidb4 2u... my heart hugz u bunches PoetFriend... Tracey, I appreciate very much you taking the time2comment and I'm really happy2learn that you liked it as well... Hugs2uPoetFriend MidniteSun, now there's a catchy name I like and on top of all that MUAHHHHH on cheekz cuz I come across you alot on these pages blue and I thank you from my heart2your's for commenting on this poem... BillSweetie, if I were2 write a romantic poem I'd need2line up at your desk2take a few tipsNlessons from the master I read on these pages blue here... Thank you PoetFriend4commenting... you're2sweet2me *~coco~* |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
shows your loving heart...I wish to save this for future readings..I think this is one of your softest poems..I too, am glad to see your face...and am looking forward to a smile some day...and eyes that glisten with contentment hugss to you ~Wynter "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh dear Coco ... this was just lovely! Beautiful sentiments to inspire the possibility that we can again ... open up to new love. Wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
WYNTER, you're a darling thank you very much4your most kind words in reply box... KITsweetie, thankU4stopping by and as always muahhhhh on cheekz2U my friend... *~coco~* |
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