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in the side of your shoe...
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in the side of your shoe... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida 
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your laughter subsided tucked away dropped neatly in the side of your shoe but as a quarter you saved for a phone call home it falls beneath the arch of your foot and gets kicked deeper closer to your sole i hope your sole is solid -- free of holes and your quarter stays between your toes for you may want it soon to call home... and when my phone rings if i dont answer know that i have merely been detained in the garden where i pick fresh flowers for you... -dgvarner 11-21-01 ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
this is poetry... regards to you, Sudhir |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Simply beautiful.  All writing comes |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
SUDHIR..such a compliment..! many thanks.. LONE WOLF..thank you much! hugs, g |
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Jeffrey E. Osborne Member
since 2001-11-01
Posts 160out there |
This is your best work yet! I agree - "simply beautiful!". Kudos! Bravo! Lots of loud clapping and cheering here!   - lv, Jeff |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You wowed me with this one, it is outstanding! I will tuck this one away, but not in my shoe, and read it again later.  |
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emily Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 142USA |
This is a keeper Emily |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
EXQUISITE!!! ~hugs, Nancy~ ~Life may not be the song you requested, |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I sure hope he has a dime in the other shoe!  Regardless, the poem is beautiful...good to see you |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
JEFFREY..my best yet? wow...lol..thanks MIDNITE..thanks (for not tucking me in your shoe..lol)! EMILY..glad you enjoyed! ENCHANTRESS..many thanks for such a big word! 'DEER..LOL..shouldve known YOU'd be the one to pick up on that 'need a dime' issue.....rofl! thanks for reading me! hope all had a good BIRD DAY! the FLORIDA weather was wunnerful!hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ "tomorrow's another day, and i'm thirsty anyway--so bring on the rain!" [This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 11-23-2001).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
dg, must agree with Sudhir, this is poetry at its best. Whimsicle and wonderful to read. Parker |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Over here in Hawaii they are charging us 50 cents for a phone call...so that was why my sweetheart didn't answer the phone...she was in the garden picking flowers...James |
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Pell Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 134Pacific NW |
This is great! a keeper |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
PARKER..thanks a bunch! you guys are far too kind...lol JAMESMICHAEL..lol..yeah..its more than 25 cents around here these days too...but for poetic purposes, a quarter and a dime just didnt do...lol PELL..i thank you! hugs, g |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dg- This is awesome! I've read a LOT of your poetry, and I'd have to agree that this is one of your best. Definitely one of my favorites. LOVE IT! Love and hugs and stuff,  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
BEAUTIFUL!!! ~*Theresia~* |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
A dime? HA in Houston it takes two quarters, one for each shoe.. so ya don't walk all lopsided. Oh, well that wasn't really the point of the poem now was it? giggle.. I liked it.. smile Remember me with a smile on your face, or please don't remember me at all. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Neat, dg, quite neat. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
TRICKS..this was a little ditty i woke up with on t'giving morn..i'm not sure where it came from really..but..you were one of the people i had in mind while writing it..so i guess you can legally say its one of my best..and get away with it..lol thank you CHARISMA..thank you for 'beautiful' LUCIE..walking lopsided could be a problem...lol and ya know, i could be wrong on the charge for a phn call these days..been so long since i used a payphn! lol thanks for reading! E..thank you friend poet hugs, g |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
1-800-collect. But then you'd have to be there to accept the charges. When did things get so complicated? Should be as simple as picking flowers in a garden. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
sometimes somebody drops a dime on somebody else great metaphorical write! a sole search...... wonderful!!! it rang true!! |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Ok i like the poem, and i agree with all above. Except the heck with the 4 bits (2 quarters) I'll just use my cell phone... Bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
dgvarner...wonderful!! Much enjoyed this poem! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
DUNCAN..should be that simple eh? lol well..just keep trying that 1-800-collect thing...i'll be back in soon DOREEN..yes--a sole/soul search..lol glad you enjoyed.. BERNIE..go with the cell phone! lol thanks for reading MARTIE..so glad you enjoyed! hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
this has some whimiscal, childlike quality to it...this is the kind of poem that you heave a huge sigh at the end, feeling satisfied..it likes me.. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
KAILE..my poem likes you? --i like you too...lol pop in anytime..  hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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