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The Tide
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The Tide |
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Pell Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 134Pacific NW |
The Tide I sense the tide is changing. Receding need tossed upon disconsolate shore, left to glisten under a pulling moon and to wither beneath a new sun. I feel you letting me go... Roiling, recoiled am I from the swells of your ebbing attention. Waiting, weighted am I by the barnacled stones of your silence. Choking, swallowed am I by the shadowed vastness of my turbidity. I am adrift and sinking. I cannot fathom where we are. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Excellent imagery, Pell. You've done a really great job of presenting the emotions of a relationship on the rocks. The ebb and flow of love really is as powerful as the moon's pull of the tides. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
The Sea of Love is not always tranquil nor battered by storm but equally balanced by strength and will both showing great form And though I watch secretly from the dune admist fallen love I find attraction to the silent moon rePELLing above Great imagery and form!! Most excellent!! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I have felt this way. I feel this poem as I read it, and I LOVE the style in which you have written it. If this is your first poem as your critique flag indicates (unless that is an old message) you are doing wonderfully so far. Enjoyed!  ~I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU!~ |
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Pell Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 134Pacific NW |
Midnitesun- Blushing thanks for your kind words and encouragement.  ctowen- Ah, so it was you, the Watcher on distant TOWERing dune, I thought I was alone.  Thank you kindly for your lovely reply. Temptress- ...Oops, I`ve been away for awhile, thanks for the heads-up. This is my second submission.  I`m very pleased you enjoyed it. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderfully done. This was a very good comparison between love and the tide. Enjoyed this a lot. Welcome to Passions, Pell. All writing comes |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
It it like that, isn't it great writing |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I think we have all been through this at some point, very well written and with great wisdom, I enjoyed thank you for sharing. Regards, Olias. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Pell, you keep writing like this and you will have an excellent following, and I will be in that line... well done! |
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Pell Member
since 2001-09-16
Posts 134Pacific NW |
Lone Wolf, Mr. McCoy, OLIAS, Sunshine... Thank you for your comments, I`m pleased and flattered. Unfortunately, my posts seem to be few and far between, as I`m often stirred to write only when my thoughts and feelings are too much to bear lol. Ah, well... Here`s to hoping for the inspiration to write of happier subjects. I`m deriving great enjoyment from reading your words as well, and those of everyone here; learning more all the time Thanks again for your support and encouragement! When words cannot bear the burden of thought, |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Excellent write! Every verse perfectly visual of struggling with love within a stormy sea. Made me feel ragged and tired. As this will do sometimes. Hope you castaway and become saved by the lover of your life! Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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