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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

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0 posted 2001-11-20 01:58 AM

A sliver of moon
  its bulk darkly regarded

           I thought of the day
              when my mother'd die

A silver festoon
  under hulk disregarded

           Daydreaming the ways
              that we all would cry

Great toenail of sky
  wrapped around a black eye

           A grand wake
              many Irish'd attend

Canoe ossified
  round black ring underlied

           Shoulders shake
              many elbows we'd bend

Last swallow of milk
  in a heaven of ink

           Would the last
              of eleven she be?

Liebfraumilch in silk
     in her casket we'd sink
           waning moon and
                      my mother
                           and me

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

1 posted 2001-11-20 04:44 AM

This one leaves me with a sad feeling, though it may not have been penned from sadness. Your moon imagery is great. Driving into town tonight, the moon was hanging so low on the horizon it seemed to be within my reach. Its full roundness was visible, and the crescent looked like a tasty roll. Thank you, Richard, for another enjoyable read.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

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2 posted 2001-11-20 08:54 AM

A sliver of moon
  its bulk darkly regarded
==================================
A silver festoon
  under hulk disregarded
===================================
Great toenail of sky
  wrapped around a black eye
===================================
Canoe ossified
  round black ring underlied
===================================
Last swallow of milk
  in a heaven of ink
===================================

Richard this is such clever writing...
such unique and cool imagery and anologies of the moon are wrapped around the bittersweet emote of this gem from thy gifted pen.
I saw this remarkable moon last night.. and it stired up memories of the same kind.
seems we poets feel Luna's pull like the tide... so many moon inspired poems here each time the moon and seasons phase.
well done poet sir

jm

I would wait till the end of time for you,
Then do it all again ... it's true.
I can't measure my love for you,
There's nothing to compare it to.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2001-11-20 09:01 AM

RSWells,
I guess JM pretty well covered it. Enjoyed

Charisma

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lost in blue pages

4 posted 2001-11-20 09:03 AM

BEAUTIFUL!!!

enjoyed it very much

Charisma ~TMP~

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

5 posted 2001-11-20 09:10 AM

Your loss and sadness comes through this poem very well. It touched my heart. I have learned there is always a sense of sadness in much of your work and for that my heart goes out to you. Beautiful, heartfelt poem that conveys well you love for your mother. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Sunshine

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6 posted 2001-11-20 10:13 AM

quote:
Liebfraumilch in silk

I know the taste of this fine wine...and it fits the poem perfectly....

a quiet well done, Sir

MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21

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In a corporeal internship...

7 posted 2001-11-20 10:15 AM

I wish we would study poetry such as this in class -- this is infinitely better than most of the "famous contemporary" works I've read all semester. And I'm not flattering.

-MVS

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Elizabeth

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Minnesota

8 posted 2001-11-20 10:18 AM

Can I say anything to your poems besides "Wow, well done?" You haven't written anything that I haven't enjoyed.

God bless America, my home sweet home.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

9 posted 2001-11-20 12:49 PM

they said it all, just to let you know I read yet another "Wells" that moved me.

~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

10 posted 2001-11-20 04:41 PM

Everything I wish to say has been said...and most deservedly too. Therefore, I shall just say thank you poet sir!
I enjoyed this very much!
Hugs, Nancy.

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

11 posted 2001-11-22 06:41 PM

An element of lunar affect in the brine of events , brilliant, sad...always memorable. Thank you.

Sincerely,
Regina

Martie

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12 posted 2001-11-22 07:53 PM

RS--You bring the reader to your poems touch with such apparent ease...a ballet that is, no doubt, more difficult than it seems....another wonderful write!

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