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No Longer
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No Longer |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~No Longer~ Take this poets pen ... for its gifts now cease to be. No longer possessing direction ... lacking in poetic expression ... Unable to write the rhymes ... to bring you back to me. Then take my muse as well ... I've no need of inspiration. No longer profound to pen in verse ... losing you became my curse ... Silencing scripted salvation ... ending elysian elation. Take also away the sun ... I don't feel its warmth anymore. No longer impressed ... with its ritual of rise and set ... Nor the crystal caress ... of the moon's habitual encore. Now take away the stars ... they cant grant my wish upon. No longer do they shine so bright ... nor light my ebony sky at night ... All my wishes I wish withdrawn ... now that you are gone. Take from me these hands ... worthless without you to hold. No longer able to embrace ... fingers numb from time's erase ... A once warm touch in lingering trace ... now growing cruelly cold. Take from me this heart ... for it belongs to you alone. No longer mine to give another ... knowing there will be no other ... Merely mine on loan ... who but you could turn it back from stone. Please now, take this pen ... losing you took my words away. No longer a voice in poetry ... no choice as the silence shadows me ... I've no words uncliche' left to say ... like you, I fear they are gone to stay. Janet Marie ~*~ ~*~ ~*~ the slight muse returns melancholy You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Your doing fine Janet Marie. Fine. |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Janet Marie, gentle one, your words still flow with the ebb of time and your pen dost show the heart of within..You do fine, you do good and your heart touches many, and many are touched by your heart...very gentle smile to a very dear one |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Janet Marie, That all depends. Your pen is just using a different color of ink for now. But it still writes well!  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ I'm so glad I got home in time for this one~ That moody little muse just brought you an inkwell of thought~ Actually, it's a perfect shade of melancholy~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah! The Brilliance shine through... as ever... as always ... Janet~ You have my regards, sudhir |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
~Deeply~ For Janet To take from poetess of lightened wings Exalted from the deepest wellsprings, eternal Though so deeply she must sometimes dive Take from her the pen so she mustn’t write Nay, for though her pen is dipped extremely deep ‘Tis the place she decides to keep That which all would savor more precious yet Than soul streams of harboring youngness Even time would hand her a new pen Quilled soft and staining..still to begin again {Hugs} for every line. Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, my dear Janet Marie ... none of these things could be taken away from you my friend. You possess them all so deeply within yourself, and they rise to the surface from your tender and sentimental muse so sweetly. The flow in this piece was so wonderful ... I loved the format of each line carried through to the next. As a matter of fact, as I was reading down the left side only, to view your format ... I don't know if you realize it (or perhaps you do,  ) ... but you have 3 poems here ... not just one.  The format, if reading only those words to the left "half" before the "...", carry a beautiful verse all to itself, and when reading only the right half ... yet another side is shown - each unique and beautiful if read alone. Combined ... they bring your sentiments to light in their fullness, yet each carries it's own subtle variation of your heart. No matter how I read it JM ... your heart is beautiful, as is this rhyme.  Best wishes (and thank you for your sweet words the other night ... big hugs), /Kit |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Janet, Such a sad write, but your pen obvousily works. And it always will... it is who you are. Which is lucky for us. We get to read your beautiful and inspiring writings. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well you guys are my morning Sun  First of all I got an email asking a q.... a friend said they couldn't find the word "elysian" in their dictionary.... I found it in my Thesaurus ... its was new to me too... the definition I found said it means "divine inspiration" and how perfect for poetry is that E·ly·sian (i-li-zh'en) adjective: of such surpassing excellence as to suggest divine inspiration. adjective: resembling paradise; causing happiness Example: "Elysian peace" Dont ya just love learning a new word !!  I'll be back in a bit to thank you all  [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 11-14-2001).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Janet, dear heart, your muse whether melancholy or not is always beautiful. It leaves you with words that the rest of us just wish we could begin to express. Your beauty not only comes from your pen dear Poetess, it comes from your heart. Hugs to you. Donna On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Janet Marie! This is an incredible write! As Kit pointed out there are actually three poems here and it is very interesting to read down just the left half. Amazingly done! Love the presentation, the thoughts, the entire piece! Your muse is still with you...always was...always shall be...for you are one gifted writer! She is just in a melancholy mood. Thank you for this one! Into my library it goes....hugs, Nancy. ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
One who can write so well about not being able to write so well has a merely missing muse - and rest assured that one is the only one who can't see where it's hiding... |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Janet Marie~ your muse speaks with so much emotion and with your grace....this is so touching....your gift is your heart, thank you for always sharing that.... Lauren [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-14-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
STUNNING!!!STUNNING!!!YOU DID IT!!!AND SO VERY PERFECTLY TOO. OH, I LOVE IT!!! I LOVE IT!!!!YOU ARE INDEED A POETESS EXTRAORDINAIRE!!!  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
 I am very proud of you as a person, for your poetic expression, your strengths and I have a long way to go...but thank you for this, for who you are and for being part of Passions. Kathleen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
But a return of the muse just the same, for are not we all melancholy at times, and which strings from us the sweeter tune... for in the melancholy of which you write softer tunes flow through this night... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Richard ... Im trying thank you poet sir for the kind words and encouragement.Logan ....and you dear one.....your reply reads like poetry thank you sweet keeper...for many things. Gentle smiles sent right back at cha Larry C ... thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate them Margie.... Im glad your back too We'd miss your warm ways here too much...thank you dear poetess....from me and me moody muse *wink* Sudhir ... thank you my sweet brilliant friend...very much Regina....THANK YOU so much for the gifting of that beautiful verse.... my most treasured gifts are those of poetry.... youre so kind to share your inspiration... thank you sweet poetess Kit...there you go spreading smiles....thank you sweetie.... Now if I was a perfectionist poet...Id of made the right half read like the left  I'll just have to do better next time..shame on me *wink* LOL thank you so much for such a wonderful reply....you returned the smiles and sweetness ten fold Tara....thank you too for such a lovely reply and the kind encouragement. I appreciate you much! Donna ... thank you dear poetess, for such a wonderful reply ... youre so good to me and for me Nancy....thank you for such an incredible reply Sometimes the rhymes just fall right ... and that format lends to letting the words flow their way ... Margie calls the (...) sprinkles ...its one Ive enjoyed using often... when me muse allows *S* thank you for your praise and the honor of being in your library. I know Im in good company Nan....that coming from you means much to me...and I thank you graciously... for both your compliments and your wise insight ... thank you very very much Lauren ... thank you my sweet friend.... very much... you know that coming from you that means much to me...and you know why. thank you for all that you share Startime...thank you for such a wonderful enthusiastic reply...you humble me Kathleen... thank you dear...and Im not strong at all...and like you, Ive miles to go before I sleep...all we can do is take it one day at a time and hope we get a little farther on to where we need to be again. THANK YOU for that wonderful pic... you know I love it  thank you so much for such a sweet reply. (LV) Sunshine....thank you my all knowing friend for your poetic insight and wisdom... I KNOW you know . And for all my whinning and teasing about my moody muse...and the writers block I have been struggling with off and on for months now.... I am indeed always grateful for every word and verse....I know I tend to write more on the sad side...I always have..even when Im happy. The words must come as they wish. The thought behind this was that no matter how much we write...or how well we write...sometimes there are no words to define...for some things cant be gotten back..not even by the magic of poetry. "Unable to write the rhymes ... to bring you back to me." (Butterflies Are Meant To Be Free) Thank you all for these wonderful and kind replies... my love and respect to Poetry Land. You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. In the sunlight, in the shadows ... No ... I'll never stop looking for you. [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 11-14-2001).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet Marie--Such an outpouring of love and respect come to you from your poet friends...why? Because you are a light...to me, to many. You shine, baby...just know that! Much love to you from me! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet Marie, BUT I HAVE NOT GONE AWAY. I AM HERE TO STAY. I AM IN SHANGRI-LA ONLY A DREAMERS FAR. winkiewinkie your stinky. As to your poem, you have sown my ego in your bed and now to the world I am dead. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely Janet...I know how hard it is to believe there will be another...until there really is another...and the transition can be a journey in itself...James |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
The weight behind this write was heavier than all its words combined -- I felt it from the other side of the poem, and that is quite the accomplishment. I'm glad to read your work again, JM -- it always reminds me of the potential words have to catalyze feeling when arranged by a heart like yours. -MVS "If you don't ask: you don't get." -Steve Miller |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Please now, take this pen ... losing you took my words away. No longer a voice in poetry ... no choice as the silence shadows me ... I've no words uncliche' left to say ... like you, I fear they are gone to stay.' 'Take also away the sun ... I don't feel its warmth anymore. No longer impressed ... with its ritual of rise and set ... Nor the crystal caress ... of the moon's habitual encore. Now take away the stars ... they cant grant my wish upon. No longer do they shine so bright ... nor light my ebony sky at night ... All my wishes I wish withdrawn ... now that you are gone.' Well, J...we've got the muse thing down...now we have to work on the positivity...OMG...I'm so sorry...did I say that?? I don't know what got into me... ...really J...it's great to see a new post from you...I don't know about anyone else, but I was going through (...) withdrawals...blah blah blah...I know...ANYWAY, beautiful imagery and style, girlie...k   And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Martie... you are quite a light your self thank you my so sweet friend..and Im sending that love and respect right back atcha Sy-babes...you better not go anywhere...not unless you and Randy pick me up on your way out Thank you my Stinky winkie love...very much SBJ ... yes...your right...thank you for your insight and lovely reply...it read like poetry Mark...my goodness your replies are wonderful...your love of poetry is always evident in your responses. thank you so much for such humbling and encouraging words. For me that is what I love most about poetry... when we read anothers words and feel them in places deep...if I accomplished that with this one...then I am very pleased. Thank you poet sir. Vandana ... thank you sweets...its always nice to see your smiles K....did you say the P WORD ON MY POEM???? hehe Well I guess I can overlook it this time thank you girlie ... glad I took care of those sprinkle withdrawls for ya Now....its YOUR moody muses turn ... try typing with some .... ACK never mind ...hehe thank you ALL for your kind words and for reading and touching me so deeply You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow Janet! This one reaches deep inside me, take care my friend! "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Janet, even if all these things were taken from you, you would still find a way to delight and inspire us with your words. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh my Babycakes...not gone....sometimes we just need to be silent so we can hear the whisperings...HUGS you. and HEY...write me back will ya? |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
how beautiful, glad that I catched this one, beautiful, beautiful penned! ((hugs))) Charisma ~*TMP*~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
My dear lady... one would not say the muse was slight after reading the words you pen. One might say the muse melancholy perhaps, but then it is the emotional that so often inspires the poet is it not, and melancholy is an emotion many of us know well. Your words here, as with all I have read of you..reflect the fact their is a genuine talent, and a genuine heart in you.... You keep writing...and I'll keep reading... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet, I've read this twice now, and I can't find a favorite line, each one touches me so completely... but then, your poetry always does this is truly wonderful |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sorry I am late on this so-called "muse missing melancholy masterpiece". Not unlike Kit I read down the left first, and that was great, then the right, and it stood alone, and then put them both together and the magic burst forth! So three poems in one, and you say your muse is missing??? Your muse is never missing just gathering up momentum for creative juice in its next run I think, but each time you think it is on strike, it comes back stronger, and brighter than ever. Can you tell I enjoyed this one ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Eagle... thank you for the wow and allowing my words to touch you... so good to see you here today my friend. Dee ... thank you sweetie...your so gracious and good to me and for me thank you for being such a loyal reader of my work Sen... yes...I know your right...but the silence sometimes speaks volumes.... love you me twin. Charisma...hey there dear poetess...so nice to find your name here... thank you for the lovely reply Capt. ... you keep replying like this and I'll send you flowers, candy and my cat thank you so very very much for such wonderful praise. You honor and humble me. When I said "slight" muse I was refering to the fact that it seems to be around so little these days....but like I said on an earlier reply...Im always grateful for the times the words find their way to the pen Thank you again for the gracious reply. good to see you back here as well. SEA .. thank you girlie-girl for the enthusiastic words and allowing my words to touch you...thats one of the highest compliments TY Sharon...your not late....your a busy new Grandma...youre allowed thank you so very much for reading me so in depthly and for such a wonderful, encouraging reply. I appreciate it so much. thank you all for these heartfelt and heartheld replies... my words wont do your kindness, acceptence, and understanding justice.. just know I am so touched and grateful. my love and respect to poetry land. jm Ice covers my soul |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Janet Marie....anybody tries to take away your pen, they're gonna answer to me!  Beautiful writing, dear lady. Everything you write flows so beautifully and says so much so clearly. I will never tire of reading whatever you find time to write....promise! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wonderfully expressed, as always JM Your moody muse is ten times better than my muse, even on a good day Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Balladeer....you keep replying this sweet and Im gonna send ya cases of Spam thank you very much my groovy guy for such lovely praise and encouragement. Melis ... theres nothing wrong with that creative muse of yours other than Hallmark hasnt got a hold of you yet thank you sweets thank you so much for the kind words |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet, me thinks you're still pretty cool!! no seriously, if this is you losing direction and words, i'd hate to see what you really think losing your poetry would be like! because girl there's no other way to say it...both you and your muse at flat out awesome! your hand holds the pen...your heart writes the words. remember all the things you ever told me during our long conversations...your words of wisdom stick with me to this day... and you my dear friend are one hell of a lady and poetress and I for one still stand in awe of you! Take care sweetie. Love ya, Amy "Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Wanted to read this again and also wish you a Happy Thanksgiving whereever you are! Just...Kathleen |
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