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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-11-18 12:09 PM

First Freeze

                        purple petunia trumpets
                        at rigid attention
                        coated in glaze,

                        sunflower~
                        tall, spindly,
                        as petals weep
                        toward earth,

                        grass sprinkled
                        with confectioner's sugar,

                        kamikaze maple leaves
                        leap to ground
                        as stems melt their grips

                        kitten huddles
                        in tight, gray angora,
                        as frost threatens
                        whisker tips

                        my elbows' edges sense
                        mother nature's shiver,
                        as shoulders
                        draw them ever closer

                        ©Nov 7, 2001

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2001-11-18 12:16 PM

Oh my goodness Virginia ... I got the winter shivers just reading this wonderfully descriptive piece. Absolutely beautiful imagery!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2001-11-18 12:17 PM

Very nice! I liked that kitten in angora, and those elbows moving in closer.

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

3 posted 2001-12-03 09:22 PM

Beautifully done! I wish it would freeze here.

Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2001-12-03 09:33 PM

Loved this VAS! Especially the kamikaze maple leaves....seen tons of those in my life, and we use to play with the helicopter seeds they spread...

Haven't see the beauty of your poem around here yet though...waiting...

jwesley

LadySofia
Member

since 2000-05-16

Posts 238
FL., USA

5 posted 2001-12-04 12:25 PM

Kamikaze? Doesn't that mean divine wind? I really liked this. Enjoy the coming snow I've never seen!

"The smallest feline is a masterpiece."

Leonardo Da Vinci

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2001-12-04 01:06 AM

thank you ALL!!! I was thrilled to see this surface again...I really think it will be one of my favorites

re. Kamikaze...I was thinking of the Kamikaze pilots of WW II that flew their planes into targets, committing suicide in an 'altruistic way'

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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