Open Poetry #17 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
in your eyes I learned, in an instant's glare. in your eyes-- discerned... lack of me in there. Expectancy. Too dark to see in such spare glare. Truancy of lack of me; no notice that I am not there. if I called shots-- a 'rider' written-- I forgot... (learned from you) and fact that I am human too. Don't you sing to tides already rising much too high. shoreline much too slim-- invite tsunami for a swim. then let me know. I will pack most meagerly. I'll trudge through years of memories' snow, each step, a journey back to ME. [This message has been edited by serenity (12-31-2001 12:49 AM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Stipulations (learned from you) and fact that I am human too." this I KNOW.... hugs to you Serenity.... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Don't do this... Don't you sing to tides aready rising much too high" Wow, this is some powerful pain and frustration. Hugs to you, sweet sister. I'll light an extra candle for you, and chant a special mantra of serenity for serenity. |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
Your words are extremely powerful.. I can relate to the emotion that you have so beautifully expressed here. ~beth ann |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Good to see you~ 'If all is gone then let me know. I will pack most meagerly. I'll trudge through years of memories' snow, each step, a journey back to ME.' May the sun catch you wearing a smile left by the moon~ Happy New Year wishes to you~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Serenity - I love how you described love not being felt by the other person through seeing it in their vacant eyes. Very sad and very good. Dave |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A question in your eyes-- discerned... lack of me in there. Vacancy. Expectancy. Too dark to see in such spare glare. Truancy of lack of me; no notice that, I am not there. ====================================== well me thinks these lines are tattoed on me forhead by now... you do know the mirrors are blinding right? whose turn is it to clean them anyway? ahh to H with it...lets go drink some rhyme water and find a pizza boy *wink* (just trying to make you smile baby) we can fake those well too cant we ..sigh heart-hugs me twin me When your own emptiness is all thats getting through |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
The ME is what is important, is it not, gentle one?..Ahh, what the moon is bringing around in thoughts this month...very gentle smile |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity - "each step, a journey back to ME." And each step is a journey back to ME. As you have so well expressed... BC |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
That ME part is the key...everybody already said that...but it's TRUE! Great expression! |
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