Dear John(Revised) - Poet De Vines Challenge

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Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2001-12-29 05:30 PM

Dear John, dearest John I'm sorry we must now part
You can't know the pain I feel deep within my heart
I said we'd be forever; that was at the start
I have to leave although it's tearing me apart

I began my learning when I first met with you
You taught me how to always love and see it through
You gave me all I needed; I was ever true
Now it's time to die to flesh, although I love you

My dearest, dearest Jonathon don't you grieve long
I will be here in the night when you play our song
It breaks my heart to leave you I must move along
Don't you worry don't you fret after I am gone

I've learned that through life's journey, life is seldom fair
Portents of disaster hang in the shimmering air
Thank you John for loving me; giving all to share
I have to go I'm sorry; I leave in despair

John I hear you crying, please don't you cry for me
I have loved you oft and long; now I must be free
Take the love that we have shared, build new liberty
Use my love with endless grace; often think of me

The path of life is fading; deaths talons draw near
And I would give most anything to have you here
Jonathon beloved, your voice calls and I hear
But I must go… it is time, I love you my dear.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

[This message has been edited by Kethry (12-31-2001 05:25 AM).]

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

1 posted 2001-12-29 07:31 PM

My name is not John but I really don't think
this is a very fair Dear John letter...Poor
guy, I really feel for him....Geeeez...
send me a tissue...

Nicely met challenge...

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-12-29 07:37 PM

Oh hell, I cant stand it, I'm supposed to be resting but I gotta write one of these!!!!!!
This is great, Keth!

I am/Kathleen/

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

3 posted 2001-12-29 08:38 PM

Beautiful, just beautiful, Keth.

copyright2001 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

4 posted 2001-12-29 08:41 PM

Well written, wonderful poetry.

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

5 posted 2001-12-29 08:45 PM

Keth darling sister of my soul
Yes you have all had me blubbing like a baby, so now I suppose you're happy. I know you warned me not to read it, did I listen nooooooooo, so I suppose the tears are my just reward.
If no one else can read this it's because it's been washed away by my tears. This is your just reward.

Beware of damp patches everyone, and if anyone has a loose connection in their circuits I'm sorry. It's not my fault if you suffer an electric shock Blame keth she made me sob so much

Wonderful writing as always, I love it but it's sooooooooo sad darling girl, I need to go and dry myself out now

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

6 posted 2001-12-29 09:22 PM

Kethry - this is so well written that I can't tell if it is true or not. If so, poor John, if not, I still believe it...

BC

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2001-12-29 11:27 PM

(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Kethry, this is so heartbreaking, I pray that this is not related to a true feeling of your heart! (sad sigh) Knowe that you are always loved by many and true love is bound to touch your heart forever! (sigh) So sad but so very beautiful, sweet friend! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

8 posted 2001-12-30 01:00 AM

im just glad i never had to write one of these Dear Johns..well maybe one..haa...you wrote it so well kethry

~Victoria~

Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

Pablo Picasso

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2001-12-30 07:00 AM

Kethry-
   Such a heartwrenching write this is.
   Death does bring some of the most painful
   goodbyes, doesn't it?
   You've expressed the emotions very well.
   Wonderfully penned.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

10 posted 2001-12-30 07:50 AM

Challenge well met, Kethry. A sad letter - I'm putting it in my library as soon as the tears dry - don't want to smudge the ink.

GenXer
Senior Member

since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

11 posted 2001-12-30 03:11 PM

Keth- Very, very good. The death of someone you love has to be the most painful of goodbyes. You did throw me off with the second stanza, because when you said I must find myself, it sounded as if the person was leaving poor John for that very reason.

Dave

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

12 posted 2001-12-30 04:04 PM

This flows along with such a lovely rhythm. A beautiful poem of love and parting. You met this challenge with wonderful grace

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

13 posted 2001-12-30 06:11 PM

Keth,
Very powerful! Wonderful write.

amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

14 posted 2001-12-30 06:49 PM

Yes, very well done.

Hey, the tissue box is empty!!!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

15 posted 2001-12-30 06:53 PM

Splendid write Kethry!! Much enjoyed. ~Hugs, Nancy~

*~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~*

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

16 posted 2001-12-30 07:05 PM

Kethry, oh my goodness, I think I need an anxiety pill. LOL. For real, I think. Does anyone have one I can borrow?

Really, you did a great job writing this. Sooo sad. Well, I better end this because I am starting to drown in all the tears. Great job.

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

17 posted 2001-12-30 07:08 PM

P.S. can you ask Marsha to stop crying...I can't swim all that well.

Again, great one here!

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

18 posted 2001-12-30 09:03 PM

Keth, this is just great! The ending had me in tears too.
Hope you have a Happy New Year.
Sandra

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

19 posted 2001-12-31 08:59 AM

Oh Kethry, this is so sad. I wish you all the happiness that life can give.

HAPPY NEW YEAR

Mac Attack
Member

since 2001-12-12

Posts 100
Ontario, Canada

20 posted 2001-12-31 09:20 AM

Kethry, You've punched a hole in my heart with this one. In spite of all the comments you have already received, I felt compelled to let you know how moving this post is. Nicely done (I hope this is not based in reality, simply too tragic)

Mac

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