Open Poetry #17 |
Hypochondriac |
amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
My head is splitting Oh how it hurts My chest is pounding Inside my shirt The feet are aching And up on the couch My back is just tweeking I am such a grouch Sorry!!! Bad poem day! |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
/The tension is mounting I cannot fall asleep I'm having trouble coping Am I in too deep?/ The first stanza definitely captures a hypochondriac. I should know, I am one from time to time. The second stanza, I am not to sure about. I think you should keep going with this one, I like the topic. Dave |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I'm aching all over but can't pin pain down I'm beginning to stammer and keep falling down my fingers are tingling and I'm numb to the core and there's a loud ringing that's not from my door I'll call up the doctor he 'd better come quick Oh Doctor, my doctor I'm feeling so sick My head is splitting Oh how it hurts My chest is pounding Inside my shirt The feet are aching And up on the couch My back is just tweeking I am such a grouch Sorry about the addition, You inspired me to do this. It's all your fault! and I have a headache! Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Thank you both!!!! I am cured...and no Keth I don't mind the addition. LOL and LOL...now my tummy hurts. |
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