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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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With You Beaches and butterflies cloud my eyes My feet are shroud in snowy brine My thoughts on high are one big sigh While my mind makes coup this fragile line Where would I go, what would I do How could I swim, how could I brim Without the very coup of you Without the pleasure of your whim Reality parallels the mist But my phantoms insist to me Without the dream I can’t exist This lovely sail, this lovely sea We meet beneath the Eden falls And spend a length in freedoms wile Inside the strength of dreamers walls A safe house for our hidden files And though our dermal cannot touch You still remain my such of much. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
this poem is such a powerful and beautiful love poem...but these few words say it all...helen "You still remain my such of much." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Helen, Good morning early bird, you sing such a pretty song. Thank you and have a happy. *L* |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"And though our dermal cannot touch You still remain my such of much." One does not need to touch in flesh, when words as lovely as these can reach across the miles to touch another's heart. Beautiful Sy.  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, You say the sweetest things. *L* Sy |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well wouldn't you know, our thoughts are aligned this morning, yes they are...have been working on a re-write and in your frame of mind? You might just enjoy... as I have yours! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I love your couplets, sweet Sy.. hope I'm not redundant in saying that - but I do love'm...  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You are the winkie in my eye ... my butterfly sigh on high You make me believe I can fly ... you make me want to try You take me to Eden's gate ... sweet poetic twist of fate My craving for rhyme in sate ... Shangri-La you create In moments grand ... you build me castles in the sand Hand in hand ... we walk your beaches of understand Painting rhyme scheme dreams ... in gifted poetic theme Wisdom in supreme extreme ... rhymed regime held in esteem You touch me with your "touchless touch" Trust me when I tell you ... it means so very ... very much ~*~ ~*~ ~*~ *winkiewinkie*  You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oooooooppppps me computer had a senior moment... we'll blame it on Randy  *L*[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (12-23-2001 10:01 AM).] |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
And though our dermal cannot touch You still remain my such of much. Love these lines, a very stylish beautiful write sir, much enjoyed. Regards, Olias. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"We meet beneath the Eden falls And spend a length in freedoms wile Inside the strength of dreamers walls A safe house for our hidden files" (smiles) Oh Seymour, all of your verse is soooooo gorgeous, but this verse had me daydreaming in delight! (sigh) Love and rapture fills your lovely words, sweet friend, may true love forever blossom in your heart! (big hugggssssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-23-2001 12:43 PM).] |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Seymour, this is lovely thank you for the *sighs* this fine day |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I had one of those warm fuzzy moments reading this one, Seymour! Kathleen (Kay) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, I love your redundant. JM, Just love what you say to me. WW R S Olias, Glad you liked, thank you. Vandana, Thank you. Mistletoe, Always enjoy your comments. Sea, Yes it is a fine day. *L* Irish, Thank you sweet. *L* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, I notice that, *L* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
While my mind makes coup this fragile line  ================================== Reality parallels the mist But my phantoms insist to me Without the dream I can’t exist This lovely sail, this lovely sea =================================== A safe house for our hidden files =================================== And though our dermal cannot touch You still remain my such of much. =================================== |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A beautiful romantic poem, Seymour. I especially loved these three lines. "My feet are shroud in snowy brine My thoughts on high are one big sigh While my mind makes coup this fragile line" The way you used the words to weave a beautiful picture is just out of this world. copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Happy holiday my Tinkerbell. Are you standing under mistletoe? Kissy kissy Winkiewinkie me. Madame C, I always look forward to your replies. *L* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Another beautifully enchanting verse from you Seymour. And though our dermal cannot touch You still remain my such of much These words really struck a chord with me, probably for the same reason you wrote them. Love JM's verse too. I think you’ve both inspired me to do some writing tonight (well, I will if I can stop reading long enough!! Lol) If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Rright back at ya. WW R S Tracey, I'm sure you will, have a happy. *L* |
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