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As She Loved Him...........
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As She Loved Him........... |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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As she loved him Time, in awe, stood still She loved him unrequited Of her own free will She loved him With soul, heart, body and mind She loved him with a passion No other would find She loved him With innocence, blushing of eyes She loved him fully Wearing no disguise She loved him With meticulous care She loved him beyond reason With a tenderness rare She loved him Asking nothing in return She loved him with emotion She couldn’t unlearn As she loved him So she freely chose to walk away She loved him That’s why she couldn’t stay. ~SEA~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
quote: this. . . I will never understand. . . don't get me wrong. . . this is a great poem. . . done with such tenderness and feeling. . . but, I will never understand this. . . great job. . .  -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. [This message has been edited by Sven (12-22-2001 09:01 PM).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
he doesn't love her back Sven thank you |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
SEA Your words are most beautiful. You are right, he didn't love her back and that is why she had to leave. One sided love is most painful. Maybe he will realize what he really had and find out that he made a mistake. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Susan, You have to be reading my mind these days ..lol...are you hiding in my bushes? LOL. With the new year coming alot of memories... good and bad... have been rushing through this brain... So far with the last three poems from you I've read... you have hit them head on. Wonderfully written.... greatly enjoyed. Hugs to you, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
yes I understand it all to well, so sad tho. I breathe the dust, the dust is me. |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ariana~ thanks! Tara~ maybe you are just sending me a vibe?!  seems we have more in common than we first thought...(((hugs))) I know what you are feeling....it's hard to keep it all stuffed in, let it out, it feels goood to let go [This message has been edited by SEA (12-22-2001 09:19 PM).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Moon Dust, yes, it is sad, thanks for stopping in |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
As she loved him So she freely chose to walk away She loved him That’s why she couldn’t stay. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ah Sue!! This is so sad!! (((HUGS))) to you sweet one! Wish there were more I could say or do to help.... Luv, Nancy. *~ Wishing you all a magical Christmas ~* |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
SEA, Ah! this left me breathless. Sven... sometimes love means letting go. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
yep, leaving is sometimes the best expression of love. Oh, yes, I fully related to this one, SEA Kathleen (Kay) |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sad sigh) Such a sad but beautifully lovelorn poem, sweet friend, this poem tugged at my heartstrings feeling the tears going down her face as she watched true love walk away. (big hugggsssssss) This is so sad but gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so very much! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is so beautifully sad, Sue. "As she loved him So she freely chose to walk away She loved him That’s why she couldn’t stay." I think everyone at some time in their lives. has experienced something like this.  Great job! copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Susan, My understanding of you helps me to understand the poem all the better. I've been there also, sweet friend. Big (((hugs))) and know I'm thiking of you. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sue...this reminds me a little of the poem that I posted where she left him...even though she loved him very much...because she could not bear the pain of losing him.. Similar...but very different...You penned the emotions of a love given...but not given back....Sad...but very true.. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Thank you all very much, emotions always tend to get the better of me, and this time of year it seems, it is that much harder to stop the flow of them. thank you for the hugs Michael  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Obviously, this one has no basis in fact as far as your life is concerned...I mean, who would not love you back???  The mere thought is absurd!!!  |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Balladeer, you are such a sweet man, *sigh* thank you  |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
There is such sorrow in unrequited love. You have written it with grace and beauty, but the sadness is felt deeply. Sometimes, for our own sanity, we must walk away when the other does not feel as deeply. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
This seems to have a timeless flow to it, as if it is an essential part of life, of love. Seen both sides, and lived upon its edge ...  you show and share great strength within these words. Well done!!  |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Susan, this really touches the heart. I know how it feels to love alone. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That I understand this with my hert means you wrote it very well - and straight from your heart... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This a unique write Sea....but, I think you should revise it a bit and include something about the guy.....anyways, you perty girl, have a merry christmas! Nathan |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
It is good to let your emotions out "on paper," so I believe it to be so anyway. I think that the repetitiveness of the first lines of each stanza bleeds what you feel and therefore works very well. I enjoyed reading your heart. |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Sea - Nicely done. Loving someone too much can be frightening, and it is shame that it causes some to run. Hey, that is the same reason my relationships never work out. They all love me too much.lol Actually, they love to run away from me.  Dave |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Tracey~ yes, very true, thank you Ctowen~ how nice of you, thank you Dee~ thank you sweet friend Sunshine~ thank you, your praise means the world to me!! Nate~ you are very sweet, thank you... Opeth~ very nice thank youDave~ I bet they don't run, thank you ~SEA |
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