Open Poetry #17 |
Just Our Debut |
1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
Just Our Debut yes, you’re right ….. time is a precious commodity taking us from half empty to half full and it’s no oddity sitting on the beach at twilight watching shooting stars grains slowly sift in our glasses while we walk parallel bars we have never been strangers fate has been our best teacher a dark side, a light side a shadowed remarkable feature both poured our tears in rivers and it didn’t turn it salty stepped on our share of cracks to make footing faulty now you wonder about the end of time this is just our debut you rescue me I rescue you "I have already paid for all my future sins." Sade...(King of Sorrow) |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
now you wonder about the end of time this is just our debut you rescue me I rescue you Great thought, this. I wish I didn't relate to it so much. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
grains slowly sift in our glasses while we walk parallel bars I especially loved those lines. Lots of emotion and beautiful images you painted with your heart. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
One of your best, Lady. Love the analogies! A debut as new and bright as shooting stars? Aaahhhhhhh, how refreshing !! e |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh I like this. A beginning, a new start, a debut.....how unique and wonderful this poem is. I love it. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
There is nothing like a new beginning. Well done, Helen! All writing comes |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
a debt that is wonderful to repay. . . wonderful helen. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Carol Lina Member
since 2001-11-18
Posts 94USA |
that beach at midnight? Now, THAT spoke to my heart! Thanks! Carolina |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is sweet, and I do love happy endings. A lovely picture painted here. |
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