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The Perfect Gift
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The Perfect Gift |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Perfect Gift He took me winding into the Washington green mountains, where tall trees embraced and swayed in airy delight atop a hill, to find sadly unkempt with tombstones, sweetened by the word beloved, his parent's grave. Oh, the years seemed so lost and still where we walked and sat on a stone wall before this place. He, so embraced the love for two so long removed from earthly pain. He told me of sweet and bitter times, his eyes glassed with memories tears and I looked down to try and find a remnant so precious to have conceived this man so vividly hunched with memory. I picked up a stone from where his mother lay and warming it with my hand, thought of the picture he had shown me, and the day his father died when finally love admitted a sigh and whispered it was so. Later, when the sun lay behind the crest and shadows crossed the rolling water he was still lost through memories door, when as a boy he loved with the bigness that hasn’t learned all the imperfections of a moment. My hand strayed from the cold to my pocket and found the stone somber and alone. I placed it in his hand and when he smiled I knew I had found the perfect gift. _________ rewrite |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
make me cry why don't ya?? oh Martie, this touches me deep. Jon took me to his mother's resting place, only just this year. Excellent emotional writing..... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Martie, this is so very heartwrenchingly beautiful, my heart goes out to you. (sigh) God Bless You, dearest friend, this is a powerfully emotional piece! (sigh) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Oh yes I agree with the others! It pulls at my heart strings!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie I see you haven't lost your touch...this is stunningly beautiful!! |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Beautifully written Martie. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ You are the sweetest ... just the sweetest~ Loved this re-write of a favorite of mine~ *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I remember this...wishing even then I could see the world through your eyes, knowing I would just have to go it on my own... one of the many gifts I receive, is reading you... |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very touching, Martie. Well written, of course! |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Marie, you always have the knack of giving the perfect gift..very well done..very gentle smile |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
A beautiful write! "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I picked up a stone from where his mother lay and warming it with my hand, thought of the picture he had shown me, and the day his father died when finally love admitted a sigh and whispered it was so. Later, when the sun lay behind the crest and shadows crossed the rolling water he was still lost through memories door, when as a boy he loved with the bigness that hasn’t learned all the imperfections of a moment. =========================================== like that stone...your poetry is a perfect gift. those lines I bolded touched places deep. heart-hugs Martie-girl jm You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Martie, *soft sigh* Perfect, without spot or blemish. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Nicely done..pulling at the heart strings..to give strength the way you have is exemplary. In the Jewish tradition we put stones on the tombstone we visit to mark our presence, do you as well? [This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-22-2001 10:39 PM).] |
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Joe Lamando Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 124Massachusetts,USA |
Martie, This is beautiful. A wonderful story and gift. Joe Lamando |
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