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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
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Words rolled down her face Emotions so clear Each word shaped In the form of a tear Pain echoed deep With the question, why? Pushed down to hollows of soul Where she could no longer cry All she had wanted All these things she could feel Walls now blocked them off Made them unreal….. Turning and twisting a heart Once so free Now inside out Miserably ….. This isn’t who she is She doesn’t want to hide Still she is unable to trust Unable, to confide How many times Can you talk to a wall Before you just stop trying Stop talking at all?! ~SEA~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Susan, I can feel such despair and agony behind these words; I can relate to this sorrow so very well. (big hugggsssssss) Every day when I was a boy, I used to go through heavy depression, and I always questioned myself "Why...why?". (wipes tears) All I ever wanted was to feel loved, and it never happened, but then I realized when I began to love myself, I feel much better, and now am happier than ever! (sad sigh) I pray with all my heart that all who feel this way can look deep into their hearts and listen to them and love themselves for who they are! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so very much! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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thepoeticplumber Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 185 |
Such despair in this writing. I feel so sad and unhappy with the wall myself now. A writing is meant to invoke thought. You have so accomplished this. Great write. Roger |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I just love your use of metaphors here, Sue "Words roll down her face" Wow!!!!!!that is fabulous A great poem, I wish I could write as well as you do.   copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Words rolled down her face Emotions so clear Each word shaped In the form of a tear ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sue! This is incredible! Fantastic! And, you KNOW I love it!! ~Hugs to you sweetie, Nancy~ *~ Wishing you all a magical Christmas ~* |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I understand these feelings all too well, Susan...yes, very well. Thank God we have friends. It certainly helps. Big (((hugs))) sweet friend and very heartfelt. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Noah~ you are a dear one, I hope you know that.  thank youRoger~ thank you very much! MC~ thank you!! how nice Nancy~ you are so sweet, thank you!! ~SEA |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Michael, you snuck past somehow, yes, thank goodness for wonderful friends like you  (((hugs))) thank you |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
walls sometimes are made of brick sometimes mortar, sometimes slick grey stone, no resonance, aloof - sometimes walls are waterproof.... rain in forms of tears can come and walls won't crumble, can't be won, no way to break their shield or hold... sometimes the walls have great control.. and oh how much i hate their strength, their height, their depth, their weight, their length!!! sometimes the walls will make me weep while talking to them in my sleep, the sounds of echoes of my voice like bitter banter banging noise..... and so i sit in spite of it and listen to another chant from you who knew and yet still do know walls that can while wishing can't ---------------- thank you, SEA... you inspired me and i'm hoping it's ok with you that i wrote this right now in response to your poem.... your verse was excellent and emotionally charging and got to me in a way that made me want to write back to you.... thank you, ........ again...... i loved what you wrote! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Doreen, I love your reply!!! Of course you can be poetic!! It's awesome. thank you for such a great reply!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nicely done Sea....You present this with such wonderful metaphors. Very very good writing! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
get the impression that we do have to have that safety catch of getting outside ourselves when heart rendering issues make it difficult to approach a loved one, nicely done and Happy Holidays to you! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ You just 'know' how to touch my heart, gal~ 'Words rolled down her face' Powerfully moving~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There is more here than meets the eye, and one would understand if they read it with their heart... well done little one... |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
I think we have all had to talk to "walls" before and some of us have been the "walls" too. I feel the frustration in these words. They could open a door in a "wall" Dan Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sea, between the words and the walls this had me crying...Marsha would be so pleased. Excellent write Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Circe darling girl, Keth is right I'm so pleased the tears were returned to her. However, what have I said about tears hummm? Do you recall that I don't want to be moved to tears again? I did put in a special plea, do you remember that? Or do you wish to be added to my You want tears list? I'll write something that will have you all howling if you don't all cease immediately making me sob. I want to be smiling and happy, it's Christmas! It's all nonsense of course I'm just trying to detract from the fact this is utterly utterly superb writing. (Why doesn't anyone write replies like this anymore?) Well written and so emotive, well done love you rock   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Very sad and deeply touching Sea, wonderful. Regards, Olias. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my ... I could feel this one Susan. It's not easy to confide in others, and even harder that when you do try, you are met with resistance. Beautifully composed. Best wishes, /Kit |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ethome~ thank you very much Ecrivan~ thanks, yes and Happy Holidays to you too!! Marge~ thank you Sunshine~ yes....thank you TRK (Dan)~ thank you Kethry~ don't cry!! thank you Mushy~ don't add me to that list!!! LOL I am sorry!!! LOL you are the best!!! (((hugs))) Olias~ thank you!! Kit~ yes, very much, thank you!! ~SEA |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
This was a wonderful poem.. I have been behind this wall.. memorizing every crack, every imperfection in the paint. This one goes in my keeper list.. which is not very long, I can tell you... I like your style! |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Susan, Wow chickie girl... you have been hitting some chords with me as of late. Once again... I can so completely relate to your words. Well done. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Geez, Susan, you paint with words to give a canvas of worth. Your ability to go from one side of the spectrum to the other is amazing..very nicely done...very gentle smile |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Susan, first off wonderful to see you! i've missed you greatly. secondly this was just beautifully stunning work!! ive read a lot of your work over the past year and a half ive been here, but this is one of my favorites definitely! poignant write, i felt it very deeply. take care and happy holidays. amy "Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
From the very first word the reader is drawn totally into the emotion of this, well done! "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sea--Wonderful writing...touched with much heart! |
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