Six Minutes After Sunrise (revised)

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Streen
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since 2001-11-28

Posts 169

0 posted 2001-12-21 02:20 PM

The sun arose for a new dawn
And I, I was awakening.
A lost beam of Aurora’s breath,
Shimmered across my eyes,
My irises arose, widened,
Ringing across morn a purplish tune,
A bell-shaped flower in the dewy mist,
Refracted the dawnlight’s glow,
And I, I was awakening.

My sheets curled off my chest,
I took step in post-twilight my
Antecedently lovelorn core,
Traversing into fruition and amor.
The first minute of dawning passed
Perceiving the heather’s aroma
Opening my eyes to greater array,
The lunar vestibule lowering,
Receding into the horizon’s edge.
And I, I was awakening.

The next three minutes went by,
As I hastened to a window where
'Twas a better view; the sun’s debut.
Slipping on a marble by the stairs,
Into a chair; I, glancing to the floor,
Remnants of yesternight's revel saw.
And when finally I arrived there,
The day’s dear dawn radiated
Leaves of all colors, flowers of all
Perfumes and sights of all wonders.
A lover’s smile and hopeful soul.
My eyes gazing unto this sight so
Amazing, the sun’s warmth-lined rays
Comforting, wrapping around my heart.
And I, I was awoken.

And then, closing my eyes for respite,
Else they be blinded by pulchritude,
I wavered in the warmth for a minute,
Not seeing yet feeling the foray,
The dawnlight’s magnificent display,
Of softly billowing pink clouds,
The misty ether drifting downwards,
The sun’s sweet smile unto all the world,
A heart’s pure token of innocent care.
And I, I was awoken.

And then, in such a manner,
The sixth minute of the day neared,
Yet my eyes remained closed,
Though I tried to open them again.
Straining to peak with my eyes,
That glory which long I felt,
Again to see the beauty of the dawn.
I struggled in vain with my might,
To clasp, grasp the inspiring sight,
Of the flowers glistening under,
Under the dawnlight’s glance.
The bell-shaped glittering flowers,
Under the dawnlight’s glance
'Twas six minutes after sunrise,
And I, I was awoken.

For a fool was I that I did not,
Did not comprehend nor understand,
That this beauty I had measured,
Was sure to unfold for it was unfleeting,
Dwelling within the awakened area,
Of my heart with petals drawing,
Drawing outwards to draw inwards,
The sun sparkling downwards onto
Two flowers twisting stems in growth.
For the day was--corollas unfurling,
Uncoiling in Aurora’s misty light--
Six minutes after the sunrise;
A portion of beauty rising,
Blossoming splendor every moment,
Every minute, month, after sunrise.
For when I was awakened this day,
And I, I was awakened,
I awoke with you by my side.

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This rather lengthy poem is about my girlfriend and my first six months together, comparing the six months to the first six minutes in a day.

-Derek

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-12-21 11:27 PM

I have to tell you, while reading this, I thought my goodness, how beautiful, sounds like love....then I get to the end, and I sighed so loud....

this is so beautiful, and the way you wrote it is just gorgeous, she is lucky.

and I am keeping this one...

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2001-12-22 02:05 AM

This is fantastic Derek...James

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-12-22 08:36 PM

*BTTT*
this is too good to get so few replies

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