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One Last Time
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One Last Time |
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DarkAngelChelle Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 87Kansas |
Empty ... so dark and lonely; chilled ... even in the warmest light from the candle's soft glow reflecting in the windowpane as evening settles in ... and the longing starts. Ghostly fingers trail across my exposed skin, leaving faint impressions; wispy tender traces reminiscent of a touch I yearn to forget, the memory painful in its power - a loving beast curling in my lap, even as it holds my head in its jaws. Why can't I throw away the torment of a past love, and get rid of the scavenger that still nibbles at my heart? All it takes is one word, one look, and you've again nested in my mind, leaving me restless, wanting the more that we had, stirring warm, bitter feelings that taste of a healing brew, false in its promises to make whole. The truth infuriates me, bringing me to my knees even as my senses fight the instinct of burning desire. Every inch aches, screaming to cast aside pride and to reach for the cure only you can administer, the prescription only you can fill. My resolve wastes away in this sad soulful sickness though I know it will only worsen if I give in. After all this time, you still somehow manage to make me hate myself for wanting you here, eliciting cravings best forgotten as I hang on to the edge of your abyss, trying desperately not to let go, even though all I want is to fall, to beg, to plead, Please ... just touch me one last time. ~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngelChelle~ 'and the longing starts' Oh my ... does this ever ring a bell or two~ What a delicately lovely write~ I thoroughly enjoyed the pour of thought~ Happy Holidays to you~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Keep writing like this...and lots of poets are going to notice you...believe me...this is excellent... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this...James |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Michelle - Your writing is so good. It makes the reader actually feel your despair. "stirring warm, bitter feelings that taste of a healing brew, false in its promises to make whole." The whole stanza was great, but those last lines capture the feeling of lost love haunting someone so well. Nicely done. Dave |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Chelle, Oh My! what have you done but brought a tear to my eye. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
This is realy good.... enjoyed |
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