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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Observation pink lips slip words through ivory posts ~ whispered thoughts go unheard ~ she is pursuing, perusing a view, with sighs ~ would you look at him |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I am not sure that I understood your poem, but I found it to be quite intriguing. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Soleil Noir, An interesting write, enjoyed |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
pink lips slip words through ivory posts ~ ==================== she is pursuing, perusing a view, with sighs ~ ======================= only a poet could come up with those lines... very cool image in that first verse...and word play in the 3rd... very cool writing, I enjoyed this unique, clever poem of perspective. well done jm jm You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Glenn Logan Member
since 2001-10-10
Posts 111Virginia |
Wonderfully subtle - oriental in feel -I love it! Glenn Logan |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SoleilNoir~ Hmmmm ... something so familiar about your style~ Have we met in another life ? I like this very much~ Happy Holidays to you~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
Great poem. I likes it a LOT! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
hey look me over I would taste your lips so pink and hear your whispers Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Glad I stumbled my way across this..  K |
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