Open Poetry #17 |
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If Only In Sips |
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Skillz New Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 4VA, USA |
IF ONLY IN SIPS We both know, Your affections will mimic the sun's retreat, Yet I beseech you afford to me that one day. Though a fleeting moment, a lasting memory. I'll pour a libation of my heart, And present it to your tender lips, And I'll pray thee drink, If only in sips. -Skillz 2001 |
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Skillz New Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 4VA, USA |
Comments: I was going to write this poem as a love letter to a girl who I wanted to go out with but instead became best friends with. I lost the nerve. Instead, I made it a poem. Even if she could only love me for a day and then break my heart, it would be worth it. |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome, and maybe Love will still be the end result, for friendship is the strongest building block. Thank you for sharing this. It is a very fine entrance poem ![]() |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful phrasing Skillz ... this is such a lovely emotive piece, very much enjoyed. Welcome to Passions! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is a wonderful first post. Moving and yearning, and very well written. I hope you and the girl become more than friends. Welcome to Passions, I hope you will enjoy it here. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Welcome Skillz, you will do well here with work like this. Write on Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nicely done, Skillz... Welcome to Passions - You'll surely find a comfy poetic home here.. Check your email for a special greeting.. ![]() |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Skillz, a wonderful penning, indeed. To ask for a woman to love a man but once, and then to leave, thinking it could be all, is sometimes not enough. I wish you well, and I hope to see more of your skills very soon. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Very tender. Thanks for the serene moment. *s Music, perfectly pitched, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Welcome to Passions! Very tender first post! I'm sure you will love it here! ~Hugs, Nancy Lee~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Skillz~ What lovely thoughts your heart has poured for us to share~ Welcome to Passions~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Skillz New Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 4VA, USA |
Thank you all! ![]() Happy Holidays! |
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