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the cashier and I
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the cashier and I |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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I stood beside you preparing the drinks while you complained about how i shouldn't splash soap foams all over you I grinned, embarrassed and watched you take down customers' orders with a smile and wide eager eyes Then I frantically tried to wash the cups (which had been stacked real high) while you pacified grumpy hollering fools who were impossible to satisfy with a steady disposition and well worded explanations Later on while the fools were eating, you took a drink, teased me about how slow i washed the cups and stated matter-of-factly that you hated the job My admiration rose for a colleague who did her job well undercover |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, at your "undercover colleague." It is amazing how some people can smile and serve and be polite to fools. This reminded me of a story from a friend in England, who waited on tables for some rich snobby people the week after Sept 11, and they spent their time complaining about how the siverware didn't match, and the tablesetting was less than fresh. Imagine the shallowness. Very good poem, faterider. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Very well done...I couldn't have said it better than as has been said above... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
KAILE..i enjoyed this story telling...  i like the way youve written it as if a narrator watching the scene, as well as being part of it..does that make sense?? lol anyway..i like it.. ! and it IS amazing how some people can do a job so well that youd never know they hated their job...wish i were more like that... hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I like it too! very cleaver writing! |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I believe this to be an excellent FV. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) I have to echo RosePetal and Dgvarner's words, your words are excellent and you write as though we feel we're part of the scene at the sink! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is a true classic! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you for sharing that story, Midnitesun..it never ceases to amaze me too just how spolit brats some people are, regardless of their ages... Decaflame, thank you for the nod of approval gale, yes, you make sense(finally!)  ..that makes two of us, i guess..but we have next year to redeem ourselves, yes? RosePetal, thanks! i don't think i am clever, though. ha! Mistletoe Angel, i hope the scene at the sink was one which you enjoyed..thanks for the "true classic" compliment.. thanx all |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I like this faterider. . . it's a great show of a piece of life. . . the style is all your own. . . it's one that works for you. . . where you are, as dg said, both narrator and participant. . . great job. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
A micro-storypoem. Nicely done. These are fun to do and fun to read. Thanks. |
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