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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2001-12-17 12:19 PM



You Are There

Some day you will smile at the darkening sky
As stars spread a black veil of polk dot gleams
You’ll see fires burn in a woman’s dark eye
As soon as you notice my passionate dreams

Sometime in the future, when shadows are deep
And fantasy visions have enterd your mind
You’ll allow lover’s nature to suddenly sweep
Into the warmth of embrace that is mine

I’ll wait for the moment to silently fold
In a blanket for two wrapped in balm of the night
For sooner or later the time will unfold
And you will be near me, embracing me tight

Just as soon as you see how I bathe in the stars
As soon as you notice the depths of my love
Whenever it happens that sign from afar
You too will be held by the light from above

Perhaps you’ll regret that you somehow let go
The one who would love you, the one you didn’t see
If only a songbird that sang long ago
Had whispered desires of love within me

The sky can’t conceal it’s sweet canopy lights
Nor cover the fire in a woman’s dark eye
That glows from the heaven’s invited delights
To a woman in love from the soft twilight sky

Some day you will notice the shades of the lake
Turning blueness to black,in the shadows of dark
Some day you’ll discover the flames that you make
In a woman’s dark eye were conceived of a spark

You are there, I am here, just awaiting your eyes
To fall into the flames from the polkadot skies

Elizabeth santos

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1 posted 2001-12-17 12:27 PM


Now this is truly a masterpiece. Someday someone will know of the rare treasure they let go. Absolutely stunning. A poem that would melt the heart of any lover. **hugs**You have met the challenge with grace and skill.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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2 posted 2001-12-17 12:32 PM


Oh boy! Is she going to love this one!  I know I sure did!  I am still trying to do one for Jenna but am stuck.

~*~  May the spirit of this season live in your heart all year through ~*~


Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 2001-12-17 08:51 AM


Astoundingly beautiful...

Liz...
My regards,
sudhir

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4 posted 2001-12-17 09:01 AM



Lady will be very pleased to see that you joined in with a wonderful rendition of your own, Lady Santos....

peaches73533
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5 posted 2001-12-17 09:33 AM


Most beuatifully written.
peaches

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6 posted 2001-12-17 06:11 PM



(sigh) You are soooooooo romantic, sweet friend, this beautiful poem will melt the love of your lifes heart forever with the embers of romance it casts! (smiles) This is such a romanticm timeless classic, sweet friend, I love it!!! (kiss on cheek) May true love forever blossom in your heart, we all love you so very much!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Nan
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7 posted 2001-12-18 07:19 AM


Stuff that dreams are made of - polka-dot skies... love it, Liz..
BloomingRose
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8 posted 2001-12-18 07:25 AM


WOW! stunning work! You always write so well.

Deb

Kethry
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9 posted 2001-12-19 06:25 AM


Liz,
absolutely stunning. Challenge surpassed.
and these words are magic! In a blanket for two wrapped in balm of the night
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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10 posted 2001-12-19 08:36 AM



I have seen such stunning responses and as I go from one to another, all I can do is smile at the treasures that are within all of the poets who took up this challenge, and made it their very own word of art...

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