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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
when you relentlessly make me smile, I am carried far above everything that troubled me before I stepped across your inviting puddle... fly me up above all I’ve ever known; smother my routine with your impeccably chosen words... when you lure me away from my temporary plight, I escape blithely across the blue that left me dejected before I considered it from your angle... sail me over everything that is familiar; put to rest my strife with your tranquil hands... when you relight the flame that began to wane, I burn mercilessly through the darkness that haunted me before I indulged in your night... bathe me in your enveloping heat; give me pure eyes with the tendencies of your mind... -kh 12/01 (hey,  )And did you know with the rain in your pockets, you can change the weather... [This message has been edited by snowpants (edited 12-16-2001).] |
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thepoeticplumber Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 185 |
Love and faith abound in this writing. It is my pleasure to be the first to comment on it. Thank you dearly. Roger |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is....EXQUISITE!!! "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"bathe me in your enveloping heat; give me pure eyes with the tendencies of your mind" snowpants...so beautiful...all! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ahem... a certain requests me to reply on his behalf   ~*~ As jeweled kisses whisper behind your eyelids of pearl I delight in the harmony as your songs begin to unfurl Gentle touches blossom next to the marbled ridge As once again we are captured by nature's bridge Moments of silence rippled through this river of time Resting against the stones in your thoughts sublime Wondrous visions swirling in the purity of this day As your fingers touch horizons of this life at play Crystal breezes caress the silence of comfort's sound Beating with in your heart as heaven's treasures abound Needles of pine sprinkle lonely tears across winter's air Blessing the miracles of birth in this privacy we share Held in memory's grasp against the shadow of your eyes The wings of velvet beat against residual morning cries Enraptured views pulse in the atmosphere of my soul As we dance through galaxies towards eternity's goal Mark Christopher [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 12-16-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
What can I say to this masterpiece. The poem itself and the response given by Janet Marie leaves me speakless. BRAVO!!**hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
when you relentlessly make me smile, I am carried far above everything that troubled me before I stepped across your inviting puddle... fly me up above all I’ve ever known; smother my routine with your impeccably chosen words... when you lure me away from my temporary plight, I escape blithely across the blue that left me dejected before I considered it from your angle... sail me over everything that is familiar; put to rest my strife with your tranquil hands... ============================ Ok..its my turn now that my secretarial duties are done.. (and good grief...if he asks...tell him the lines are even)  What I dont do in the name of friendship (wakkawakka) heheanyway...to the poem.... WAY COOL to see your muse returning girlie... and to be so inspired...it must be nice... Aquarian Inspired no less love the imagery and emotional tie ins in this Kris...and I love the 3 line verses with the couplets completing the thoughts in between...and the presentation. Thanks for posting...(like you had a choice...you were out numbered) LOL Its not like you to say sorry, |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
snowpants- This is simply gorgeous.  Made my heart smile for you two.  Hugs, ~Vicky LOL @ JM...you should start charging for that 'secretarial' stuff. You could make a fortune! LOL "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
This is simply lovely, snowpants! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
snowpants - most wonderful words, as you have written them. A touching writing... BC |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
oh lovely! Deb |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
poeticplumber: thank YOU for reading...I am glad you enjoyed this! Enchantress: thanks so much! glad you liked it! Martie: thank you! glad you could stop by! MC: hey baby...what can I say...well, I'll tell you later...thank you, sweetheart...  startime: why thank you so much...I appreciate your kind reply! glad you enjoyed it! J: hey girlie...thank you sooo much...you know how I appreciate your replies...and, yeah, I GUESS I had no choice, huh? I would have been trampled, I think...heheVicky: thank you, my friend...I truly appreciate it! glad you liked it! TA: thanks so much...good to see you! Bill: thank you! I am glad you enjoyed this! Deb: thanks! I appreciate your reply! sp  And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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