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Shallow Grave
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Shallow Grave |
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DarkAngelChelle Member
since 2001-12-06
Posts 87Kansas |
Winter's night falls, absolute darkness drowning out the light, swallowing it down to the very -pinpoint- of existence. The cruel words you uttered resound in my mind as I sink below the damp, freshly-turned earth. My skin is frozen, numbed by the cold, longing for the warmth of your touch. But you willingly left me to die here alone, entombed in my quiet despair. Phantom fingers brush my cheek with tender concern as my heart goes to sleep. Icy cold surrounds my soul as welcoming darkness calls me home. One day, the sun will shine again and bathe my face with rays of bliss. The sweet summer breeze will softly sigh, its gentle whisper once more coaxing color into my pallid ivory features. But until then, in this shallow grave I wait for the clouds to disappear, and for love's gentle thaw to revive me. ~What is cherished most is what must be the hardest fought for.~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I loved the way you brought the cold to me, with the promise of the warmth to follow  this is fantastic writing |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh, I love the way you throw the darkness into the light, thereby making it more visible and tangible. Lost love's chill awaiting warm rays of love's light. Well done! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A bit of POEtic insight in this...it likes me...thank you! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Chelle, A familiar story, enjoyed the read. |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Chelle,very dramatic poem and well written.   Juanita |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
DarkAngelChelle - a very telling writing, and told from within. Sun shine will happen again, I also believe this... BC |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* such sadness fills this poem and then the light shines with hope at the end. I am glad the grave that traps you is shallow for I believe, too, that you will raise to feel again the warming rays of the sun. My heart goes out to you. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Michelle, my heart cries out to you, such sadness and despair fills this poem, though also hope shines too! (sigh) I know with all my heart that you will again crawl and embrace the sunshine and feel love and joy from the grave! (sigh) Just believe in yourself, and listen to your loving heart, and you can achieve anything! (sigh) So sad but well-written, sweet friend, we all love you so much! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michelle, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A beautiful poem, so dark and yet so full of hope. I love the way you take the reader from the darkness to the light. Well done, Chelle.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Is this the same Michelle Hamilton from the old Moontown site. I never pictured you being from Kansas. I don't know if you remember me, but I used to go under Dledge95 at the old MT site. Anyway, this is very good. It definitely captures the essense of lost love and the despair that follows it. Well done. Dave |
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