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Rogue24
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0 posted 2001-12-13 10:53 AM


You are There Here With Me

You are there here with me
Your soft voice like a melody
My mind filled
With tranquility
You are here inside of me

You are there here with me
My heart yours for eternity
I sing you this, my loves plea
A song embraced delicately
You are here a part of me

You are there here with me
Our souls linked internally
A connection lifting our spirits free
What we are, what we will be
A love forever here with me.

Alone in the dark, through my thoughts comfort I do seek, through my words I find peace.

© Copyright 2001 T.W. Rose - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-12-13 10:59 AM



A beautiful response to a delightful challenge...you've met this quite well, and should grin with some pride...it's a Keeper!

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2 posted 2001-12-13 11:25 AM


This is charming and lovely...
I really enjoyed the play on the challenge phrase...you turned it into several poetic phrases and created a romantic soft melody of rhyme and verse.
Very cool, all these perfect challenge responses with this pretty phrase makes me want to write one...where is my mooody muse  
Well done Poet Rogue!!
jm

Its not like you to say sorry,
I was waitin on a different story.
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breaking.

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3 posted 2001-12-13 11:27 AM


yes, Like Janet, I liked the way you played on the challenge phrase   this is really great  
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4 posted 2001-12-13 11:38 AM




(sigh) You are sooooooo romantic, sweet T.W! (sigh) Your love shines in all these beautiful words! May true love forever blossom in your loving heart! (smiles) I love it!!! (big hugggssssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet T.W, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Rogue24
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5 posted 2001-12-13 11:50 AM


Sunshine:   thank you   I hope I did Lady some justice

JM: Muse, what a love hate relationship eh? one minute its your best mate, the next all you get is attitude   I am glad you enjoyed my write. Thank you for your kind words.

Sea:   This was a very fun challenge, I enjoyed playing with the words!

Noah: As always your kind words warm my heart, I am so glad my work is enjoyed!

Hugs!
Ter

Alone in the dark, through my thoughts comfort I do seek, through my words I find peace.

N orth Carolina Girl
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6 posted 2001-12-13 12:22 PM


Rogue,this was wonderful!I must say you handled the challenge perfectly.

Juanita

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Sudhir Iyer
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7 posted 2001-12-13 12:23 PM


this is fantastic....

regards,
sudhir

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8 posted 2001-12-13 12:28 PM


Terry,

     Ohhh this is really wonderful My first response was awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww   Well done.

Hugs,
Tara

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     - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

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9 posted 2001-12-13 01:09 PM


*sigh* so very romantic...this is just the kind of poem to put me in a wonderful mood for work....so much feeling in your words. I love it. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Rogue24
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10 posted 2001-12-13 01:40 PM


NC Girl: Thank you so much   I had fun writing it!

Sudhir: GLad you enjoyed it  

Tara: Hugs sweetie   I am a sap you know it  

Startime: I am glad I was able to help make your day warm! Hope you have a great finish to your day!

Hugs all!
Ter.

Alone in the dark, through my thoughts comfort I do seek, through my words I find peace.

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11 posted 2001-12-13 05:45 PM



Rogue, this poem only proves you are unworthy of your name, for a sweet poet penned this, and not a rogue...no, not at all.  Well done, Sir!

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12 posted 2001-12-13 07:07 PM


I must agree...no rogue could write this so
well...

Titia Geertman
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13 posted 2001-12-13 07:37 PM


Just wonderful

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14 posted 2001-12-13 07:55 PM


Fantastic!  Challenge well met!  ~hugs, Nancy~

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

Rogue24
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15 posted 2001-12-14 02:49 AM


Lady In White:   thank you for your words of praise, and thank you my inspiration, without your sweet words and lovely challenge these words would have never graced my heart. My gratitude is yours My Lady.  

Magnus:   Thank you for your kind words, cheers!

Titia:   thank you

Nancy:   Thank you for reading! I thoroughly enjoyed this challenge and look forward to more!
HUGS
Ter.

Alone in the dark, through my thoughts comfort I do seek, through my words I find peace.

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