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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17
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0 posted 2001-12-11 07:31 PM


The wax paper sky wept a grey day
and I draw tight it's miserable sog
like a cheap suit in the rain.

The only tan I'll know is residual blush
from an inappropriate statement or
tincture of torrid titulation.

Your magnanimous Sun reveals
a pine of whine whose wind's
a cheery sail through coastal suburbs.

Of pine I know it's tar assuring firm
gripped swatting of flies in sunny nuisance
or fouls misaligned from well lit rules.

I'd rather occupy my hands helping
a hat make headway through a gale
than coerce a channel changer from
Dow to War, from worry to sin.

I prefer to be the coarse hand gypsy
centering his will to the lighting of his
last match ensuring a fire.......and life

or the single mother in her triumph
finding the last can of beans
behind the cornstarch...........

than the several deadly sinner in
a fright mask posing purity
to the blind.

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

[This message has been edited by RSWells (edited 12-11-2001).]

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Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
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1 posted 2001-12-11 07:35 PM


This is a bold piece of writing.  Something I am striving for in my own.  
Sometimes I won't post something because it "doesn't sound like me"
but I know it really "is me"
The line that got to me was the one about the single mother.  From working in a food pantry, I can see that scene as clear as day.

Kathleen (Kay)
"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Startime
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2 posted 2001-12-11 07:36 PM


Oh my gosh....you are speaking with such power and confidence that in the reading of this poem I had to make myself stop to breath. Messages within words that are there to make the blind see. BRAVO!!! Another of your masterpieces. You will ever leave me in awe of your poems as your pen dips within an inkwell that puts you ever beyond mortal touch. **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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3 posted 2001-12-11 08:12 PM




BRAVO!!! Oh Richard, your philosophy and wisdom shines in all your fabulous words always! (sigh) I too would rather be one free of sins before I die, and open to the world and the spirit of His love and throw that rubble out of my heart and become enlightened at bay! (sigh) Soooooooo wonderfully written, dear friend, your words always say such powerful expressions! (big hugggsssss) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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Gaia
4 posted 2001-12-11 10:59 PM


"I'd rather occupy my hands helping
a hat make headway through a gale
than coerce a channel changer from
Dow to War, from worry to sin."

My sentiments, exactly. You write with raw honesty.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-12-11 11:19 PM


The wax paper sky wept a grey day
and I draw tight it's miserable sog
like a cheap suit in the rain.
====================================
I prefer to be the coarse hand gypsy
centering his will to the lighting of his
last match ensuring a fire.......and life

or the single mother in her triumph
finding the last can of beans
behind the cornstarch...........

than the several deadly sinner in
a fright mask posing purity
to the blind.
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That first verses imagery is just too cool
and I do so enjoy the reality check of your
"in our face" poetry ...
your social commentary with your raw edge of witty sarcasm always makes for an intersting view.
cool poem Poet Richard
jm

Its not like you to say sorry,
I was waitin on a different story.
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breaking.

Nickleback

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