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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2001-12-10 05:47 AM



If I Were a Poet

If I were the moon, I’d embellish your eyes
With jewels made in heaven, the stars from the skies
I’d shine opal light on your fairness of face
Caressing your hair with a moonlit embrace

If I were a song I’d be hovering near
With lyrical pleasures surrounding your ear
I’d shadow your mind with melodic eclipse
And the music would pour from your heavenly lips

If I were in love, I would walk on the strand
Gathering stars in the cup of my hand
I’d string you a necklace from bright midnight skies
To equal the splendor of jewels in your eyes

If I were a poet, I’d gather the words
That float from the dawn’s early warbling birds    
I’d douse them in succulence, bathe them in wine
And lace them together in verses divine

Elizabeth Santos


[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 12-10-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Elizabeth Santos - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2001-12-10 05:53 AM


Oh, but you are...

Liz,
My regards,
sudhir

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2001-12-10 06:04 AM


"If I were a poet, I’d gather the words
That float from the dawn’s early warbling birds
I’d douse them in succulence, bathe them in wine
And lace them together in verses divine"

Echoing Sudhir ... you are, you are! This is splendid in both meter and rhyme as always, and the descriptive sentiments and imagery are just beautiful Liz ... a wonderful read!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

rwood
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3 posted 2001-12-10 07:41 AM


You are much more than just a poet. You're an incredible poet. Bravo and more. Resplendent!

Sincerely,
Regina

Tim
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4 posted 2001-12-10 08:26 AM


beautifully written...
Allan Riverwood
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5 posted 2001-12-10 08:32 AM


Yes, I agree...

I haven't seen anapestic poetry of such quality in a very, very long time.  Such a flow is something unique, it's something to be proud of.  I think that the rhythm would have to be my favourite part of this poem.

Other than that, I love the constancy of the way you began each stanza.

What a great morsel of poetry...  

~Allan

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6 posted 2001-12-10 08:34 AM




(smiles widely) And you do, sweet Elizabeth, for you embellish all our eyes and hearts with such heavenly sweetness of words and your lips sing like the warbling birds you inspire to create a symphony of divine verse. (kiss on cheek) You are such a loving, talented poet and friend to us all, and we all love you so very very much! Soooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend! (big hugggsssss) You have such a beautiful heat, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

icequeen
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7 posted 2001-12-10 10:20 AM


I have to admit, I have read your work before, recommended highly by a friend. I have loved it all, my favorite of all of them being the one titled "Words Unspoken". I keep it in a file in my favorite papers.

So, if you were a poet - you would be the first book on my shelf  

You are a poet genius. Your talent is really huge. I'm glad to know you are still posting here.

...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes

Sunshine
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8 posted 2001-12-10 10:21 AM



No "ifs" about it!

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2001-12-10 10:27 AM


Elizabeth,
A poet looks for many things
But mostly that phrases sings.
Well done, love Sy

Irish Rose
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10 posted 2001-12-10 12:12 PM


A flow of elegance, Liz, simply perfect.

Kathleen (Kay)
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Laurie Lee

sodpossom
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11 posted 2001-12-10 12:14 PM


I think its safe to say,you are a great poet.Very enjoyable!
Elizabeth Santos
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12 posted 2001-12-10 12:28 PM


Sudhir,
Thank you, poet of life

Kit,You are truly my twin, always there

Regina, Thank you for the very kind words

Tim, Thank you

Allan,
Coming from you, that is quite a compliment and I thank you. I appreciate your talents

Noah, your responses are more like music. Thank you for your sweet comments

icequeen, Your remarks are very generous and warming. Thank you so much

Sunshine, THank you, dear

Sy, You were my music teacher

Kathleen, Thank you for reading. I appreciate it

sodpossom, I've never been called "great"
It has a certain ring to it.
Thank you

Liz lol


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13 posted 2001-12-10 01:58 PM


Oh my...simply superb!  

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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14 posted 2001-12-10 02:07 PM


Pretty devines verses

Corinne
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15 posted 2001-12-10 02:20 PM


Very lovely, Elizabeth.

Cor

Martie
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16 posted 2001-12-10 02:28 PM


Liz--You are extraordinary...in many ways..this is one!  Hugs!
Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 2001-12-10 05:26 PM


Michael, Interloper, Corinne, Martie
Four of my favorite poets in a row
Your words mean so much.
Thank you
Liz

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