Open Poetry #17 |
Lost ( not so good haiku) |
Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
My soul seems to be Ever so lost and I dont Think it will come back |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Senryu is good too, and your heart is still with you, it shows in your poetry, and perhaps your prose too |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I can relate to this. Very direct and precise. Very good. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* sometimes we do feel lost in life. This poem is so very sad. I don't know much about Haiku but this seems to be a good one. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh so sad written....Like it Charisma ~*Theresia~* |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssss) Oh, dearest friend, I know just how you feel, my heart goes to you! (sad sigh) There are times in all our lives when we feel lost every once in a while, but always believe in your loving heart and you will find the path to riches and joy! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, our hearts are with you! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Nonsense..i think this was well written and one that most of us can relate to..and that is the markings of a good poem, yes?? a suggestion though: i think it would be preferable if each line in a haiku/senryu is a complete thought in itself... |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Not GONE...just mis-placed! It is your soul's desire that comes through that pen that you lay out these beautiful words with. Timothysangel *Whatever souls are made of...his and mine are of the same* ~Emily Bronte' |
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