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Observations From the Bar |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Music blares raucausly in the broken down bar where nightly excursions offer limited dreams of better times. Men gaze hungrily in the broken down bar at women filled with nameless hopes walking tightrope over constant lies and their own starving hearts. Women offer themelves boldly in the broken down bar to false passion with cold men in hopes of experiencing the warmth they seldom feel. People drink endlessly in the broken down bar as eyes once bright grow dimmer with each fading hour as timelesness is passed. During the unhappiest of Happy Hours in the broken down bar where logic and reason fade to oblivion they wait as the glasses clink to an ancient tune Though for what, no one really knows. [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 12-09-2001).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Sandra, this is so sad and heatbreaking! My heart goes out to all these sad spirits who worsen their spirits like this! (sigh) I cried throughout this sad poem! (big hugggsssss) So sad but well-written, sweet friend, your love and compassion shines in all your words! We all love you so much, sweet Sandra! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandra, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Unfortunately it happens in any kind of bar. Great observation here. |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
that's deep sad thought. A good remark on somewhere in the society. I heard some say most people are loners. ~Flower lasts so an hour, yet spring will brings her back to life again. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
A lot of lonely souls can be found at the bar. I hope you are feeling well sweetie. You deserve the utmost happiness this world has to offer!  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* love can not be found in a bottle....that is why I do not go to bars. How sadly true you paint this picture. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Gosh Sandra, this is soooo true eh? I once in a while like to sit in one and people watch. A lot ot stories could be written there... if it weren't so dark and smokey. LOL....Good write! ~hugs, Nancy~  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
let us drink then. . . to what? well, that's the question. . . you show it very well here. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
catalinamoon - a bottle, a drink, a broken down bar, and hearts looking for whatever? How true are your words in this writing... BC |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Great observations, Catalina Moon... and very well written!  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
I agree with you *catalinamoon* there are so many loss souls in Bars...looking for something to erase what they feel, or help them to feel again. God Bless Timothys Angel Dont let it end like this, tell them I said something. ~Pancho Villa |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I think I have been in this place ... there was a neon light blinking in the window, with that insistant "buzzz" ... empty laughter, stale pretzels, and "creaky" floorboards. A toast ...(raise glasses clinking) to broken memories. |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
You've managed to draw up the picture the blue smokey atmosphere quite well.... Thank God I've never been there...  Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
You paint a stark, realistic picture with your pen. Congratulations on an exquisite piece of work. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
been a long time since I've been in a bar (yes, once Irish Rose went to bars by the way, Sandra, thank you for your kindness and compassion on my thread in feelings. Merry Christmas to you and yours. Kathleen (Kay) |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I had to read this, given the title. I am part owner of a bar/restaurant. Though, I spend very little time in the bar section. Mostly for the reasons you've written. And you nailed it...perfectly, Sandra. |
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JoMason Member
since 2001-12-07
Posts 57 |
Catalinamoon, In the broken down bar You've shown many broken down hearts. Either no stranger there you are, Or friends of yours often play these parts. So real it . . . you can feel it. Jo Mason 12/10/01 |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Thoughtful reponses, all. Thanks. Yes, I have spent many nights in similar places, but it was some time ago. I figured out that it never makes you beter in the end. But its an interesting way that much of the world lives, seeking something that just cannot be found. Peace, all Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
This makes me think of Billy Joel's "Piano Man"... How can one hope to find "the better things in life" in a place that's built upon the "worst" ones..? If only they could bottle up true love and serve that to "all the lonely people"... -MVS "Your focus determines your reality." --Qui-Gon from The Phantom Menace |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
You've painted this scene quite vividly, Sandra. I pray my life never becomes one of such despair that I'd become a regular in this broken down bar. Be well, my friend. Nice work! *hugs* Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
How well you captured the namelessness and hopelessness of despair. Aren't you happy to be far past that |
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