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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-12-09 11:29 AM


Courage?
Yes, I'll pass that test,
erase fine line
foolhardiness...


A brain? My God,
I pray it stop.
erase refrain
of every thought.


A heart?
I wish it would not beat.
erase the tears
flow down my cheeks.


My Wizard, won't you
hear my plea?
What have you
in that bag for me?
A witch's broom,
I'll give to thee--
Send me home.
eternity...



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with you
1 posted 2001-12-09 11:33 AM


Serenity, you are toooooo good   this is so completely cool. I loved it!  
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2 posted 2001-12-09 11:33 AM


Only if they send you to serenity. Good write. *L*
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3 posted 2001-12-09 11:53 AM


me thinks this witch would ride a magic carpet or a winged stallion...even a Randy dragon  
but not a broom....much too cliche' and ordinary for your gifts me twin.
and you know I love the metaphor play here me dear.
me

Its not like you to say sorry,
I was waitin on a different story.
This time I'm mistaken ...
for handing you a heart worth breaking.

Nickleback

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4 posted 2001-12-09 01:23 PM


As always, nicely done, Karen...true serenity!

Michael

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There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

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5 posted 2001-12-09 01:24 PM


Love this, if only the wizard would do something to help hm?
Sandra

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6 posted 2001-12-09 01:35 PM




(smiles) WOW!!! This is so creative, I love it!!! (big hugggsssssss)  Yes, may we all find our place somewhere over the rainbow and seek our dreams and seek happiness as we fall into lifes ecstacy. (sigh) I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2001-12-09 01:47 PM



Brain working overtime?  Good job!

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8 posted 2001-12-09 01:47 PM


Well done Karen....I shall send my wizard and a magic carpet your way....  

~hugs, Nancy~

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
9 posted 2001-12-09 06:36 PM


serenity - you possess the magic when you write. A definate caring intelligent woman you write about...

BC

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10 posted 2001-12-09 06:38 PM


The wonderful magic that flows from your heart to your mind and out your pen is much more powerful than what any wizard can give you. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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11 posted 2001-12-09 06:44 PM


This is very clever, Serenity... I don't know what made you think of such an idea for a poem, but you really pulled it off.

Because this is such a simple piece, I won't bother to critique anything about it.  But I will say that it's very original, and I love the flow of it.

Awesome work, babe.  

~Allan

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12 posted 2001-12-09 08:18 PM


yes. . . let's just ride that broom into the sunset. . .

great one here. . . yes, a very unique idea. . . and you know how much I love unique ideas. . .  

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serenity blaze
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13 posted 2001-12-10 05:38 AM


Thanks everybody! SMOOCHES!!! Gotta go...got places to go...sigh...love again to all..
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