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Dorothy Surrenders
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Dorothy Surrenders |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Yes, I'll pass that test, erase fine line foolhardiness... I pray it stop. erase refrain of every thought. I wish it would not beat. erase the tears flow down my cheeks. hear my plea? What have you in that bag for me? A witch's broom, I'll give to thee-- Send me home. eternity... |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity, you are toooooo good  this is so completely cool. I loved it! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Only if they send you to serenity. Good write. *L* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
me thinks this witch would ride a magic carpet or a winged stallion...even a Randy dragon  but not a broom....much too cliche' and ordinary for your gifts me twin. and you know I love the metaphor play here me dear.  me Its not like you to say sorry, |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
As always, nicely done, Karen...true serenity! Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Love this, if only the wizard would do something to help hm? Sandra |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) WOW!!! This is so creative, I love it!!! (big hugggsssssss) Yes, may we all find our place somewhere over the rainbow and seek our dreams and seek happiness as we fall into lifes ecstacy. (sigh) I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Brain working overtime? Good job! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done Karen....I shall send my wizard and a magic carpet your way.... ~hugs, Nancy~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity - you possess the magic when you write. A definate caring intelligent woman you write about... BC |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
The wonderful magic that flows from your heart to your mind and out your pen is much more powerful than what any wizard can give you. **big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is very clever, Serenity... I don't know what made you think of such an idea for a poem, but you really pulled it off. Because this is such a simple piece, I won't bother to critique anything about it. But I will say that it's very original, and I love the flow of it. Awesome work, babe.  ~Allan |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes. . . let's just ride that broom into the sunset. . . great one here. . . yes, a very unique idea. . . and you know how much I love unique ideas. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks everybody! SMOOCHES!!! Gotta go...got places to go...sigh...love again to all.. |
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