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Saunni
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since 2000-07-11
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0 posted 2001-12-06 04:22 PM



I'm Afraid To Breathe

I only know how to write, my Dear Friend
I only know how to speak from a heart that never turns off
I only know how to react to what catches my eye
But, believe me when I say it's all done out of love...

I could never tell you why I am so afraid to breathe
I only know the shortness in a breath that I take
I only know how to look at a sunset and see it's magic, My Friend
Even if another view is surely at stake...

To you, I am beneath in a way I have to be
Just I never feel the physical pain being there
I can't make sense to why God would place me in front of you
And, expect myself and this heart to not even care...

I am but one thing to you and it's a way I must be
But, tell me, My Friend, what will happen if I breathe?
Cause it's not what you do for me that sings so loud
It's an ache that I know is certainly not allowed...

Don't ask me to explain why my trust lies within you
All I know is there is something about the way your heart moves
And, maybe it's because I found one much like the one I own
I just wish I could breathe all the way in but not alone...

It's a sense of safeness, a sense of grace, that I carry here
It's a sense of not crying but still you see the tears
And, now what do I do so I just don't breathe in?
I'm afraid to breathe that you may know what I'm thinking then...

Forgive me if I write like I so shouldn't write
But, I refuse to let go of what I carry through the night
I'm afraid to breathe even if it is just one time
Cause soon the hour is through and I'm back to nothing's mine...

*Sauni*
@~~>~~>

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

© Copyright 2001 Saundra - All Rights Reserved
EagleScorpion
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1 posted 2001-12-06 04:41 PM


mmm.. its good that you are able to let your feelings out in this way. I know how the feelings you describe here are, i've been that way many times before
Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05
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Michigan
2 posted 2001-12-06 04:46 PM


A very moving, spiritual type poem, Saunni.
I especially loved the second to last verse...and the line about not crying but still seeing the tears.....
I know that feeling and you have enunciated it perfectly.
Your poem did make me want to shed those tears.

Lyra

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Sven
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3 posted 2001-12-06 10:09 PM


what happens when you breathe??

well. . . try it. . . you'll be surprised. . .

there's a lot going on here. . . well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2001-12-06 10:12 PM


Enjoyed reading this...take a deep breathe and relax...James
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5 posted 2001-12-06 10:19 PM




(sigh) Take a deep breath, then release with hope and faith! (sigh) Your beautiful heart always means so much to us, sweet friend, and we all love you so very much! (sigh) I love it, sweet friend! (kiss on cheek) BRAVO!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Saunni, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton



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Canada eh.
6 posted 2001-12-06 10:24 PM


I like this!  It's what's going on between the lines that needs to be read.  Very good!
~hugs, Nancy~

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

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