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Can’t Sleep
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Can’t Sleep |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England 
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Can’t sleep... Moon is hanging in the black smudged sky like a dirty yellow balloon, and it is full, just like my head... Ribbons of words unspoken, are twisting around my brain, like a roller coaster ride, up and down, just like life itself... There’s no way to go back into the day, and get rid of the words that I should’ve said, but couldn’t, leaving you time to slip your angry words in, like so many sharpened little knives... It’s too late now, and you won, so I’m finally getting up, because your little knives keep digging in when I toss and turn, and they hurt... I know you said that you didn’t mean them that way, but no matter how you threw them, they still stick me, and there is pain... You didn’t say you were sorry, and I never told you that I wanted it You are proud, and I am, too...so, here we are, looking at the moon, feeling like the strangers we are, and wishing that we had each other to share with The two of us, passing time together, because we can’t sleep... Or is it that we can’t sleep alone? ...you are me, I am you, we are one... [This message has been edited by Sunnyone (edited 12-04-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* such pain...if only we didn't let pride get in our way so much deeper pain could be avoided. My heart goes out to you. I hope you share your heart and sleep with him again soon. **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Startime ~~~ Oh, please never fear, as I wrote this in remembrance of intense feelings I had a long while ago. It was an exercise in memory, to see if it was still sharp, and to prove that "all things pass".....thank you for your concern, my friend....  ...you are me, I am you, we are one... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Good write, Sunny, I did one today about my memory of a strange relationship I once had. Sometimes memories make good material, I think. Sandra |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Hi sunnyone, I liked this, especially your last 2 lines. Hey, that is a cool pic!!! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Sandra, and yes.....memories are a constant source of lurking subjects when I can't glean a fresh idea out of the present...thanks, lil sis!! Hi RosePetal, and thank you too!! The pic is one I played with in my computer graphics program. I am simply a novice at art, although it is a kick to play at it!!! ...you are me, I am you, we are one... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sunny, this is so so sad, my heart goes out to you and the pain you had to go through! (wipes tears) I cried feeling the pain you felt, and I pray with all my heart that now it has all passed and you rest with him again happily! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is so sad but well-written! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sunny, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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lunatic Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 172 |
I love the finale! Well done, indeed! Let thy moon arise. William Blake |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Hi Sunny!! I'm glad this was a reflective piece, but I'd NEVER read anything into a poem  who me????Good to see you!!!!!! Kathleen (Kay) |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
~~~ Noah ~~~ Don't worry, my dear friend...the pain felt in this one was from years before, but sometimes it is good for us to look back and reflect...thank you for your loving reply! ~~~ lunatic ~~~ Thank you, and as a mystery fanatic, I have always believed that the ending was what left the taste in your mouth after reading...the aftertaste is as important as the meal!! ~~~ Kay ~~~ Hi, and yeah, I think all of us are guilty of reading things into what is written!! Me for one!! Thank you, and I always enjoy seeing you, too!!! ...you are me, I am you, we are one... |
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