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The Salesgirl Sighed
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The Salesgirl Sighed |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
What relief, that’s so brief, pausing for a moment, Watch things fly, while she’d sigh, before she’s over spent, Then to rush, in the crush, of so many others Setting mind so to find that nothing now bothers, For a while, she would smile, after relaxed moment. Gloom |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I sigh and somehow find this poem soothing. There is a feeling of tenderness and understanding in your words, dear man. This poem touched me. **Hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
How I wish I could better understand your work  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 WOW!!! I love your rhyme scheme in this poem, it is so wonderful! Such comfort and emotion always is woven in your words, I enjoy them very much! (big huggggssssss) BRAVO!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Aszard, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ProfessorGloom~ What a timely piece this is~ I so enjoy making a salesperson SMILE~ It's part of my mission in my holiday shopping~ Costs me nothing more than a kind moment to receive a "Gosh, thanks ... I needed that." *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Startime, Glad to sooth, pleased you liked it, Just a moment I saw and attempted to catch in a poem Thank you, Interloper Glad you liked, It’s really a simple poem 5 lines with a A,A,B,B,A rhyme and internal rhyme metered loosely with 12 feet, 6 for the internal rhyme (3 foot long each) 6 for the main line. Thank you, Mistletoe Angel Your responses are always so warm Thank you, Marge, Pleased you enjoyed, I just try not to frighten them, A salesperson with a smile is a delight Gloom |
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