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Need response!!! Please...(ONE MORE TIME)!!
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Need response!!! Please...(ONE MORE TIME)!! |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
Hi, All... My song "One More Time",is about to be put into music, by an English composer. And produced into a demo...SO I really need you to tell me what you think about this one. Thanks. Brian Eggertsen. " One More Time " © 2001 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved V1: I thought with time the pain would go away, but it gets worse everyday, left me with just, memories. Memories that only love can hear, flooded my heart with a million tears, now I'm drowning from inside... V2: Every hour of every day gets longer, and my heart starts to hunger, but I can't give, it the love. The love that it misses oh so much, wish I could reach out to feel your touch, wish that I could hold you close... C: Just One More Time, I wish I could feel your lips against mine. Just One More Time, I wish that I could have an endless night. I wish I could have you...One More Time. V3: With every breath I take I can feel you, but there's nothing I can do, now I'm down, down, I'll never. I'll never rise 'cause I'm in to deep, I just wish I could hear your heart beat, and see your beautiful eyes... C: Just One More Time, I wish I could feel your lips against mine. Just One More Time, I wish that I could have an endless night. I wish I could have you...One More Time. C: Just One More Time, I wish I could feel your lips against mine. Just One More Time, I wish that I could have an endless night. I wish I could have you...One More Time. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*simply beautiful* this poem reads like a song from the heart and it is very beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing it with me. **Hugs**I hope you have the greatest sucess with it.    Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Congratulations, and good luck on the song. I read it through, and even without hearing any music, it looks as if you have some very singable lyrics here. GOOD LUCK !!! |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
I agree! This is going to make a pretty song. Congrats to you! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sorry, hallucination. Passions has strict rules about posting the same entry in multiple forums. This one is also present in Teen. Those wishing to respond may go there and do so.... |
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