Open Poetry #17 |
When Sunlight Falls Marge's Challange |
Martie
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When Sunlight Falls When sunlight falls The clouds are softening my blue for all the sky of me today is too much space to fly So I take deep breaths of white inhale the moist break of color look with my heart folded If I can sift the air I’ll stir it in my china bowl with love and set it on the table to rise Then all the sundown winds will blow this feeling fine into all your hearts with words To fly to fly in opening wings for all this sky of me today is too much space for me alone when sunlight falls tomorrow it is yours |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Very beautiful, Martie! Soft and lovely! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Martie...beautiful as always.... "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So I take deep breaths of white inhale the moist break of color look with my heart folded If I can sift the air I’ll stir it in my china bowl with love and set it on the table to rise Then all the sundown winds will blow this feeling fine into all your hearts with words To fly to fly in opening wings for all this sky of me today ============================== *SIGH* the Sky ... like the Moon ...(all of nature) is definatly one of your sweetest muses. this is so cool Martie-girl..read like a ride on a cloud |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Beautiful indeed, well done. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) Oh Martie, this is sooooooo beautiful, your skies are endless with inspiration and you spread your wings and speak from the heart so lovingly! This challenge is beautiful, I love it! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You're making me awfully happy here.... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is very nice, Martie. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
GEE WHIZ - I can't keep up with all the replies to Marge's challenge, leastwise the entire board, but this one would have been my loss to miss...loved it (as usual) Martie. jwesley |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
typical Martie...effortlessly exquisite! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Sister of my heart ... this is so touchingly lovely~ Particularly fond of these thoughts~ If I can sift the air I'll stir it in my china bowl with love and set it on the table to rise How perfectly beautiful is this thought~ Love you bunches~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This one appears to fly so softly and effortlessly. This is just too beautiful to for me to attempt to paraphrase: "To fly to fly in opening wings for all this sky of me today is too much space for me alone when sunlight falls tomorrow it is yours" |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
My Stars, Martie, what a wonderful blend of words to make such a delightful meal on..very gentle smile |
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Joe Lamando Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 124Massachusetts,USA |
Yours are such beautiful thoughts. I especially loved the notion of sifting the air into a bowl to rise. I shared with you the joy you must have felt in while writing this poem--saved to my Mattie file. Hugs, Joe |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
What a wonderful write.. I found the following lines particularly beautiful .. "If I can sift the air I’ll stir it in my china bowl with love and set it on the table to rise" Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
With the greatest of ease, beauty rises from that bowl of love to be shared with us all, thank you for this. ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Martie
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Hi Denise--thank you for being here. Nancy--thank you..hope you are feeling better...I think I recall you saying you were sick. Janet Marie--A ride on a cloud..yup...that's just the way it was. Daniel--So glad that you liked this...thank you. Noah--Your comments are always so sweet...thank you. Karilea--If I have made you happy, then you have made me happy. Smart Chick--Thanks so much for your nice reply. Balladeer--Sometimes writing IS effortless, and sometimes not..thanks so much for the exquisite! Coming from you it means alot! Jimmy--Thank you for letting me know you liked this with your sweet reply. Marge---bunches of love to you too..and hugs for the inspiration you have given to so many. Midnight--Thank you for the beautiful. Logan--You make me smile..thanks. Joe--I'm so glad you shared the joy...hugs back! My Enchanted Melody--thank you for letting me know which lines were your favorite...I appreciate your sweet reply. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Sharon--I missed you in posting at the same time...thank you, my friend, for your lovely reply. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Read this several times. Enjoyed it very much. Thank you. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
You write beautifully, my friend. Much enjoyed! *hugs* Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Nature Girl Junior Member
since 2001-10-19
Posts 31 |
*sigh* Just lovely. No, not just... when you write of beauty, when you write of anything, Martie, you dabble questions between the lines. Your gracious images, and those unspoken interrogation points -- that's what I love about your writing. A few faves: ~ If I can sift the air I’ll stir it in my china bowl with love and set it on the table to rise ~ Mmmmm (quietly). (Thanks) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
To fly to fly in opening wings for all this sky of me today is too much space for me alone when sunlight falls tomorrow it is yours Hey, thanks for the sunlight, she's peeking through on this lovely Friday morn A beautifully written piece Martie, it's great to read you again and a challenge well met dear. Now to catch up and read your other poems hugs, miss you Maree |
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