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Butterscotch Sky - Marge's Challenge
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Butterscotch Sky - Marge's Challenge |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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From the depth of illusion A butterscotch sky Brought me confusion Though I didn't know why A sky coloured toffee Bring tears to my eye Reminding of coffee And days long gone by So golden, so yellow Too sunshine in hue Does not make me mellow As it ought to do Rich as the morning So sticky and warm With hint of new dawning In butterscotch form I should be entranced But the memory flies by I'm not romanced By a butterscotch sky Its warmth and its wonder Could brighten my day But I sense the thunder Behind butterscotch way Reminiscing…I cry Some one must now pay Turn this butterscotch sky To a cold, drab, grey, day Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Lynne, I cried reading this, it feels you feel so sad deep inside. Is there something wrong? If there is, we are always here for you, for we are all happy to help. (sad sigh) This is so sad but beautiful, sweet friend, I always love your words! (kiss on cheek) This challenge is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lynne, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth darling sster of my heart, will you stop capping every poem you write with another better one. Mmmmmmm Butterschotch Sky, you really are a terrific writer. and will you stop winning now? I love the way this one moves too, and no I don't always say that. Uttery utterly fabulous, and if you think I'm going to write another one you are sadly mistaken, all I can think of is the Big Rock Candy Mountain, or that song in Doctor Dolitle sung by Anthony Newley, My Friend The Doctor and for some very odd reason the sight of Chitty Chitty Bang Bang keeps intruding. Ahhhhhhhh it's the child catcher, who incidentally used to scare my children to death. That scene where he appears with lolly pops and offering goodies. See how my mind jumps about. Isn't it good there's plenty of space to do it.   Love and warm stuff as always Slushy    To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kethry Well not everyone likes butterscotch. But I like your poem. *L* |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Missed you Keth, you and your awesome poetry! (((warm hugs))) Charisma ~*Theresia~* |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
If I didn't like butterscotch before now, this would bring me to it... Well done, our Kethry! |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Mmmmmm I love buttescotch.Great job. Peaches |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is wonderfully written, O Kethry... Been missing you, Regards, sudhir |
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Joe Lamando Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 124Massachusetts,USA |
A poem well done! Wish it didn't have a gloomy ending though. I was journying on the beautiful path of your poem and I crashed and died. Another stanza expressing hope for a different, more pleasant outcome,perchance? I like happy endings, I guess. Joe |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Like your poem, but I'm with Joe, I like happy endings, nevertheless a good poem Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Noah, thanks. I am not sad it was simply a blue muse. Have you ever seen a sky so beautiful it makes your heart ache...well this was a reflection of that. Marsha, I'm sorry love...I wasn't thinking. Seymour, I'm glad you like my poem and I'm glad I like butterscotch....although it seems to be a warped color for a sky. Charisma, I missed you too. Just thought I'd stop by to play awhile...I didn't know I'd get caught in a whirlpool of challenges. *HuGS* Darling girl! Thanks for the awesome. Lady, your kind words bring a butterscotch glow to my face. Thank you peaches, Sweetness is as sweetness does it seems. Thank you for being sweet. Sudhir, I have missed you my friend, when I return to the bosom of my family it is much sweeter that they are there to greet me and remember who I am. Thanks Joe, thanks. Here's a new ending just for you. Reminiscing I cry this butterscotch hue takes me out of my sigh and lifts me from blue. Titia, Thank you, and for you a new ending also, one you may prefer. This butterscotch sky surrounds me and then I'm lifted up high with the things I can't ken (understand) but butterscotch sky so high up above can cease all my sighs and fill me with love Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I too would like a happy ending but I just couldn't help but love this poem. **hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I love Butterscotch. And, this is very good. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this one Kethry! AND...I love butterscotch! Hugs, Nancy. "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ How utterly wonderful~ I have seen a 'butterscotch' sky ... and you have done a marvelous job with this phrase of inspire~ Thank you, sweet lady for participating~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
WOW! I almost missed this one! You did fantastic here, Keth!  Let's see now...if you saw a butterscotch sky on Sunday, would it be a butterscotch Sunday? Intriguing thought....  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Startime, for you a happy ending. this butterscotch dream so rich and so warm is scooped up like cream and sorrow's begone SmartChick, Yep I make the best Grannies butterscotch this side of the black stump...that's maybe because I use real butter and real... Enchantress, there's something rich and dreamy about even the word isn't there. Marge, I have not seen a butterstoch sky...well I have! but over here they are called delusions and they lock you up for talking about them. Deer, that'll be enough parlour talk from you thank you very much! Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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