Full Aware of Inspiration (experimental rhyme?)

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Open Poetry #17

Full Aware of Inspiration (experimental rhyme?)

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2001-12-03 03:35 AM

I am in the best of my inspiration.
In quiet dark, my words are desperations.
Seperation from thoughts with words
Integration of my voices heard.

In the night of morning now
I, such sleep, am not allowed
Loud my frenzied passionate fingers
Proud my sweetest poetry bringers.

Raise with me the solid sound
My feet no longer storm the ground.
Found my thoughts and now they air
Resounding ringing, ever there.

Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since

peaches73533
Senior Member

since 2001-11-04

Posts 981
OK, USA

1 posted 2001-12-03 04:09 AM

And what wonderful thoughts they are.You did great here.
Peaches

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2001-12-03 05:33 AM

Experimental or not
I like this.
One observation:
I, such sleep, am not allowed
Might flow better, meter-wise as:

Such sleep I am not allowed

Minor point to a good poem

Gloom

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2001-12-03 08:07 AM

(kiss on cheek) And your words always linger enchantingly from your golden heart like honey as they splash upon the pages of your soul! (smiles) Oh Jennifer, you are always filled with such inspiration, this is sooooooo beautiful! (kiss on cheek) I love you, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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