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Temptress
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0 posted 2001-12-02 02:25 PM



When sunlight falls
it
f
  l
o
  a
t  
   s
softly down on yonder frowns
and smiles in beams
s        p        r       e       a      d
in abundance
a  r  o
u   n
   d
It happens lightly on a gaze
with sunlight's trickle
skies are blazed.
When sunlight falls
it ~ssshhhhhh~
whispers whispers
f  
     l
           o
                a
            t
         s
on fickle breezes
sends its  s
            p
            r
            i
             n
            k
             l
             e
            s
when sunlight
F
A
L
L
S
it pours
and warms
brightens
makes winter's breath seem less cold.
Chases away my moon but promises to let it return.
When sunlight falls
it
shhhhh...whispers
and the world

  
      
  s           s
   m         e
     i     l      

    



Your storm of assumption feeds anger I am calm enough to hold inside. Don't pretend to know me if you've never put stretched out your heart with since

[This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 12-02-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
Mistletoe Angel
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1 posted 2001-12-02 02:28 PM


        

CLAPPING WILDLY!!! I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) Your words paint such lovely softness and beauty! (smiles) Sunshine always warms our hearts during the winter, as do your beautiful words! Sweet whispers of warmth are spoken from your lips! I love you, sweet friend! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (edited 12-02-2001).]

Enchantress
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2 posted 2001-12-02 02:37 PM


Jenn!!  This is fantastic!!  I love poetry with a unique presentation, and this one sure has it!  WONDERFUL!!  
(Glad I don't have Marge's job of picking a winner!)
~hugs, Nancy~

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

Startime
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3 posted 2001-12-02 02:42 PM


Oh I absolutely love this one. So very unique. Marvelous.   **hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2001-12-02 02:59 PM


this is very cool...love the presentation and format...
Marge has got to be thrilled at all these wonderful creative poems she has inspired.
Her autograph is a magic muse for many it seems  
Perfect entry to the challenge/contest.
Well done poetess Jen.
jm

he said ... "dont cry" ...
said "it only hurts forever ... and all we have is time."

~Tabitha's Secret~

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Gaia
5 posted 2001-12-02 04:54 PM


Temptress, this is great!
I really like the way you sprinkled us with your sweet sunlight.

VAS
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6 posted 2001-12-02 04:59 PM


Absolutely wonderful! Love the shape of it, the words of it, the play and tenderness of it. I have to admit, I'm getting a headache, though, thinking of the work to get it to come out on 'this' page as you did.

Oh, me, you have stamina!!!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Denise
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7 posted 2001-12-02 07:03 PM


Oh, Jenn, this is fantastic! Very well done!
Greeneyes
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8 posted 2001-12-02 07:48 PM


Jen, this is so calming, and so peaceful.....I love the way you did this....beautiful....


Lauren~

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9 posted 2001-12-03 08:18 PM


TemptyOne~
STUNNING~
Thank you for this 'inspire' of delicate presentation and thought~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
     noles1@totcon.com                

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10 posted 2001-12-03 10:34 PM


flowing freely are we???

wonderfully done. . . you get better every day. . .

----------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Corinne
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11 posted 2001-12-03 11:07 PM


Hi jenn!

This sparkles! Hope you are well!

Cor

Sunshine
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12 posted 2001-12-04 10:45 AM



Jenn, no easy feat, this, I know how difficult these are to do!  A wonderful challenge, met well by your imagination!

owgman
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13 posted 2001-12-04 11:24 AM


clever use of the tools!!  dug it
Logan
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14 posted 2001-12-04 11:41 AM


Ahh, gentle one, very gentle smile, the sun has no smile, that outshines yours.
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