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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2001-12-01 07:36 AM

How Long Did It Take You To Get That Ugly?
Marge's Challenge : A Gloom Sonnet

They were just words mixed with beer and laughter,
Only I remembered their sound after,
Cruelty mixed with the jukebox’s playing,
Contrast with what the music was saying.

It took a lifetime shattered in a word.

They turned to their beers as I left my drink
Wandering off into the night to think,
Glad for leaving to be rid of that place,
Hoping for rain to wash pain from my face.

Only a moment shattered by a word.

Drifting to depression walking the night,
Down graffiti alleys away from light,
In shadows from the window’s reflection,
Avoiding the ugliness detection.

Gloom

catalinamoon

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1 posted 2001-12-01 07:43 AM

Well that must have been a really bad word, to have so much impact. This is a strong poem, Gloom, much appreciated.
Sandra

Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2001-12-01 07:47 AM

Thank you, Catalinamoon,
Sometimes simple words have great impact,
You probably have a few of your own;
Glad you like how I met Marge’s Challenge.

Gloom

Sunshine

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3 posted 2001-12-01 07:58 AM

Not what I expected, and everything I expected...

A challenge well met, indeed...

Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2001-12-01 08:03 AM

Thank you, Sunshine,
Well, with a line like that to work from;
Glad you appreciated it,
I figured most would have turned this line
A bit differently.

Gloom

Kethry
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5 posted 2001-12-01 08:34 AM

Gloom,
you are right most would have turned this phrase differently, but you turned it with passion and depth.
Write on
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2001-12-01 08:46 AM

Yanno? I just HAPPENED to be listening to what I think is perfect music accompaniement as I read this (talk to me about spelling when I'm sober) but Janis Joplin? singing "Turtle Blues"? with this? sheer perfection!!!!

Professor Gloom
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7 posted 2001-12-01 08:53 AM

Thank you, Kethry,
Glad you liked my turn of the phrase,
But it’s just like walking
Instead of one step after another
One word after another
Sometimes it’s surprising where you end up,
But I always seem to end up at the same place.

Thank you, Serenity,
Glad you found an accompaniment,
I never seem to find a picture or tune to go with
My morbid words except in my own mind,
(usually the tune is Bach)

Gloom

Poet deVine

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8 posted 2001-12-01 08:59 AM

Challenge well met! One word can cut deeper than the sharpest knife. I enjoyed this very much sir.

Professor Gloom
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9 posted 2001-12-01 09:14 AM

Thank you, Poet De Vine,
I am glad you liked my words
One word can be deadly.

Gloom

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2001-12-01 09:15 AM

Prof,
Perfect gloom.

rwood
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11 posted 2001-12-01 09:22 AM

This is really good Gloom! Such biting feelings and hurt. Even if from a word..people can be so cruel and nasty. Your walk was dark and descendant of quiet ache.
Very well portrayed.

Sincerely,
Regina

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Except for what's in the heart.
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Titia Geertman
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12 posted 2001-12-01 09:28 AM

WOW, this is good, and deep, and beautiful

Titia

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Marge Tindal

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13 posted 2001-12-01 10:45 AM

ProfessorGloom~
What a wonderful curve of inspire~
You met and exceeded anything I would have expected from that line~
Now ... e-mail the URL to my mailbox !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Startime
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14 posted 2001-12-01 01:14 PM

Very inspired was this poem. Words can have an affect that lasts a lifetime...how I wish we would only use words that are filled with uplifting another instead of destroying their personal worth. **big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

jwesley
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15 posted 2001-12-01 01:21 PM

Words, as you've so well written, can be life or death - me, well, I've always been so ugly so they don't bother me anymore (I've come to terms with it) but in the 5th grade...I wanted to disappear.

jwesley

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16 posted 2001-12-01 02:14 PM

Wow Professor! This is excellent and a challenge well met! I truly enjoyed where you took this one...most would have gone a different route. THIS is what makes you such a profound writer!
Enjoyed, hugs, Nancy.

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

Professor Gloom
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17 posted 2001-12-01 05:16 PM

Thank you, Seymour,

Thank you, rwood
Glad you liked it,
Such are most of my walks.

Thank you, Tita,
I am pleased you liked it

Thank you, Marge
I have no desire for prizes,
Just that you enjoyed it is prize and reward enough,

Thank you, Startime,
Yes that would be nice if people did only use happy
And kind words to others,
But there is a thing called freedom of speech
And honesty, as brutal as they might become.

Thank you, Jwesley,
I believe you might understand,
We do adapt, outwardly, despite the inner pain.

Thank you, Enchantress
Glad you enjoyed this different route,
I am often on the road least taken.

Gloom

Doug Pretorius
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18 posted 2001-12-01 05:31 PM

The title really grabbed my attention and it led to a poem I must say I wasn't expecting. At first I thought it would be some joke, but found in the words a pain deeply felt.

I really enjoyed the imagery of the rain washing away and hiding in the darkness.

Doug

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19 posted 2001-12-01 07:04 PM

You certainly live up to your name...both in the gloom of this poem and the professionalism in creating it. Hats off you you, professor

Martie

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20 posted 2001-12-01 08:13 PM

Prof Gloom--You did this so well..with the sensitivity of knowing how words can hurt...you painted a very real pic...and did it all with great style. Enjoyed!

Midnitesun

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Gaia

21 posted 2001-12-01 11:30 PM

Can I say beautifully ugly and not offend?
Well written Professor.
What's in a word?
Try reading "N" by Randall Kennedy.

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